I don't understand how this turned from a funny parody to an angsty thriller. While, yes, they're both written well, but this 180 degree turn wasn't what I was expecting at all. It's like there are two stories here separated by a 5 year time-skip that isn't explained at all.

should just delete this from the site

just leaving here. This have been some of the shittiest stuff I have ever read.

fuck this was bad.

what a shitty jump. No transition at all from 12 to 13. Didi the snot bubble pop so hard you got a concussion when you started writing chapter 13?
Besides that I liked it

some of the typos are truly funny 8

i would slap her and the banshee stupid fucking whores

How sad, a good story turned into trash because the author couldn’t be bothered to stay within the confines of his source material. You really should have put some thought into this, (wo)man

Lul, meant to write that it could destroy his self worth and just look at hinata

It, by the way, also destroyed his self—worth and thus harms his potential massively, just look at hinabtauchst. It isn‘t something a normal person would write and find acceptable like you

You know, being an insulting asshole to your 5year old nephew is simply a malicious act,nothing more. The fact that you obviously think that that is good shows how you really need to go get help

Solid story, but dude use fucking English all this nii-chan shit it's dumb just you english. It can also he confusing.

What the flying fuck happened to this.

After long years. I once again remembered this and managed to find it again. (Praise Google-fu)

This might be one of my all-time favorite chapters.

TenTen in Boruto is only chunin level