Don't be silly, fave chapter so far, thank you so much for staying true to character!

KAWAIIIIII and awkward AF

Your writing is fucking amazing. This is my first time writing a review for a fanfic and believe me I read lots of them. It's just so funny I'm trying to keep a poker face while reading it. I hope you still write, fanfiction or something else. 3

that is good. update soon please.

So glad they are getting more comfortable with one another instead of the constant awkwardness between the two that I swear was thick enough to cause difficulty breathing...That explains why Naruto kept holding his breath. Also noticed Sasuke is finally being more open with Naruto, it's adorable how he's slowly opening up to everything. I certainly wasn't expecting how blunt he can be about sensitive topics, but it was hilarious. I almost choked when he asked Naruto how far Naruto wanted to go. That was the last thing I thought Sasuke would ever ask about. These two are just too cute and I can't wait to read what happens next. :)

I thought I'd caught up with the story until I read the note. On my way to read the rest!

oooo, yes, i LIKE that idea
LETS talk about sasuke uchiha, because FUCK, i think we need to
wow i’m either really slow or sasuke’s scientist joke was just too sophisticated for a second . . . not sure which
(also i’m at starbucksliterally when am i notand i just watched this lady in the parking lot trip over her FLIP FLOP. who does that? anyways)
naruto, no one IN college actually says shit like “college shenanigans” wtf
damn sasuke you winded after that 3 meter dash like what. honestly, i do wonder which of the pair is actually more physically able. like i GUESS technically it’s naruto since sasuke admitted he lost, but idk they seem almost . . perfectly even to me
YOOOOO we even got CHOJI up in here now? i’m pumped bro let’s gooooo
yeah, ABORT, abort RIGHT now cause even i’m embarrassed
can i also attend this cooking class with naruto and sasuke? i feel like my skills could use some polishing. definitely don’t just want to be around heat and sasuke and naruto.
anyways, another beautiful chapter. i can definitely tell that this story has spanned a long ass time period because your writing gets . . . exponentially more sophisticated XD which is NOT a bad thing. it’s very different from how quirky and humorous the first couple of chapters were. still really good, just different. just like naruto and sasuke’s “relationship”
onto the next chapter ~

i feel like sasuke thinks so freaking deeply before he says literally anything at all, the RESTRAINT of this man is ASTOUNDING, considering . . . well we all know what sasuke’s lack of restraint looks like
god naruto you’re such a d*ck sometimes you know that
really had to accentuate the fact he only wanted one chocolate covered almond huh
GOD DAMN IT STOP SAYING ONE XD
even I wanna die after reading how descriptive sasuke eating an almond can get
*cough
well i wasn’t expecting THAT
WHOA
WHOA
WHOAAAAAAAA
*cough, hack, CHOKE, CHOKE, CHOKING, CHOKING, DYING, I-
i-
i-
i don’t know if i can handle this
fuck it let’s find out
WOOT chapter 17 here i come

i accidentally posted my review before finishing lol. guess you get 2 from me this chapter yayyyyy (i know u hate me lol)
yeah i’d say that was the PERFECT opportunity and you literally ripped it into a million pieces and flushed them allllllll down the shitty, shitty toilet, naruto
so nice one.
HE WHO SHALL NOT BE LABELED BOYFRIEND IM DED
just him? yeah, naruto, just you XD you’re the only one on this incredibly confusing emotional journey. oh, and me, of course, watching you go through it, lol
YO
sasuke HAS mastered the zero fuck tone. THAT’s why he sounds like that in shippuden. makes sense
“we’re both lost” why is that the cutest shit i’ve ever heard. love it. love it. want it.
is sasuke STILL studying rn? jesus christ. model student everyone. sasuke uchiha.
naruto always forgetting to breathe n shit. someone get this man a ventilator
naruto, sasuke could be a literal rock and you would STILL give him love and attention, stfu
first of all, it’s NEVER a shitty time to kiss, so GET that thought out of your head RIGHT now, plz and thank u. don’t make me cue “kiss the girl” just so it happens like it needs to
awwww. Awwwwwwww. AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW. “don’t give up on me” THAT IS SO FUCKING CUTE AND SWEET OH MY GOD. you, my dear author, must make someone VERY happy in life because there’s no way you can write like this and not translate that to reality
no i’m pretty sure that’s what all college students do on spring break
why does that line remind me of the time i bought a live lobster and they cooked him dead right in front of me? *tear
DEWORM ORPHANS THE FUCK
didn’t even know that was a place until you said it. you really do learn something new every day
PFFTTT AHAHAHAHAHAHAHA
definitely my favorite part (if i haven’t said that already cause i DEFINITELY don’t have multiple favorite parts in a single chapter or anythingdamn the guy for pulling that classic doki-doki move the other night, and fuck if he didn’t mentally put a ring on it” like XD what’d you put a ring on naruto huh o.O
whoaaaaaa HOUSEWIFE? does that make sasuke the dom? pretty sure it does. teehee.
pictures of cats wt-
OHHHH MYYYY GODDDDDD
ROCK MF LEE
THE MAN THE MYTH THE LEGEND
ahem sorry
oh my- wHAT prime window-
yo we even got my mans cap in this? love you bro
is it just me or is naruto actually getting smarter? he just used the term REM knowin what it is n stuff, proud :,)
WHAT kind of class is THAT i- want to join
i didn’t know you could just pass on youth like that, that’s dope
so sasuke makes JOkes now o.O
okay dear author, i love and hate you because you make tense and awkward moments between them literally SO HARD and cringy to read, but i LOVE that you make it so realistic that i’m shying away from my phone to escape embarrassment that isn’t even mine. you have ALL of my applause
love cacti. glad sasuke does too. everyone should have a cactus
i feel like we’re fiiiiiiinally getting somewhere with these two! i mean i try not to get my hopes too high because naruto does some real . . . not smart things sometimes (most of the time) so we’ll see what really pans out innnnnn 3 . 2 . 1 . .

um, no. i’d have to say that NO, there is NOTHING more important in life right now than you, naruto, kissing sasuke, like fr
oh my god are you telling me we missed a smooch by THAT MUCH? really? REALLY?! ugh
AWWWWWW OMG OMG OMG
okay, that was actually SO FREAKING CUTE OMG. sasuke making an effort who woulda thunk. i . . . ADORE IT! love this, love you sasuke 3 for once lol
“their relationship”
love the fact they actually ACKNOWLEDGE it now, much appreciated
you know naruto, i’m starting to think YOU’RE the hopeless one in this relationship, not the other way around

shit I need an inhaler right now, gimme some of that
XD it’s NEVER immature to say shit, it’s okay naruto
i reallllyyyyy connect with the line “he’d been swimming in an ocean of doubt and vulnerability long enough to NOT want to take his shirt off in front of this guy.” not that he and i are in the same situation WHATSOEVER, (unfortunately) but i really feel that
wow you really use your big girl (or boy?) writing in this chapter, no wonder i was having a hard time reading it last night when i was half asleep
whenever i see the word “superfluously” i can ONLY think of the time when (CAPTAIN) jack sparrow said the same word but much gayer in pirates of the carribean XD is that just me or . . .
pffffftttttt
DAMN sasuke, the confidence is . . . OVERflowing might i say
i love how naruto turns into a rocket scientist just to decipher what the EFF sasuke is saying (when he literally just made a joke, like omg)
AGAIN SASUKE
AGAIN
he throws a STRAIGHT pitch holy HELL. why aren’t men that freaking bold in REAL life? well . . . okay nevermind i take that back. some men be not knowin’ their boundaries o.O
naruto i think you can be FULLY naked for this conversation, WHAT are you talking about. makes it so much better tbh
wicked wizard of the west XD that one might take the cake this chapter. i think that’s my favorite part
hypnotize and stun oh my- naruto you ON something right now
speaking of commandeering, love the 2nd pirates reference (even tho you’re probably not even referencing it at all i just enjoy making those far-fetched assumptions)
stop making motivational metaphors XD oh crap is THAT how you get things done? the more you know . .
i love how accurate this is because this is how a REAL conversation would go, with naruto being the usual mess of words he is and sasuke waiting until he can decipher said mess and respond
there’s no other term for dating naruto just shut up while you still can plz
not gonna lie, a dating relationship between them doesn’t pan out in my head either. but that doesn’t mean i don’t want it
what do you MEAN they’re not going to be anything after this? after FINALLY admitting their feelings? UGHHHHH! is this why this story is called NOT? because they’re NEVER actually going to be . . . ANYTHING?! i will literally fight you. or maybe i should just keep reading to find out what’s next. ugh. you’re lucky i wanna know what’s next
OH JESUS NARUTO CALM DOWN, WAIT, WAIT, WAIT, ITA NOT TIME FOR KIDS YET OH MY-
YOU CANT HAVE 2.5 CHILDREN NARUTO WHAT. MY MANS IS GONNA CUT HIS CHILD IN HALF OH MY GOD SOMEONE SEND AUTHORITIES
hold up how can you MISS something that’s nonexistent? whatever, okay
oh my god XD oh my GOD. shout out to making me laugh out loud (WHY am i always in STARBUCKS when you do that to me?) cause that string of text messages was . . . FUNNY
NARUTO
i’m dead. i’m literally dead. THE GREATEST GOOD YOU ARE EVER GIING TO GET ARE YOU KIDDING ME-
i literally can’t. i’ll brb
okay back to being *really lovely people* towards each other i see
BITCH WHAT
WHAT
if someone EVER stated that they were going to kiss me right before actually kissing me, i think i would pass out. oh god, i hope to HELL that naruto doesn’t pass out please, i need to read this
i have to say that this was probably your most well-written chapter. the flow of events, sentences and words is all very smooth and sophisticated while still being incredibly humorous. you are such a good writer and i enjoy it more and more every chapteronto the next ~

SASUKE’S LAST LINE I AM-
I-
I MEAN-
WHAT THE-
AHHHHHHHHHHH
AHHHHHH
AHHHHHHHHH
NEXT CHAPTER SORRY I HAVE TO KNOW WHATS NEXT

unspoken insecurity lol
i don’t know WHAT nobel prize naruto thinks sasuke is winning but okay XD
yo what is HAPPENING right now, i am just as confused as naruto
that was just . . . i don’t even know, what, exactly, that was
tension?
i might be even more nervous than naruto for this talk, what’s aboutta go down?
it shall be revealed in 3 . . . 2 . . . 1-

dancing in the nile wtf . . . wow naruto you really not gon pick up that phone huh
that’s messed up
for the next seven years XD can i say that the next time someone i don’t wanna talk to texts me? who am i kidding that’s literally every person lol
BRO why are we counting down, the HELL is gonna happen at one I AM SO CONFUSED AND NERVOUS
i NEVER have to fake intense interest in MY clothing selection . . .
3:07 that’s so specific
“simple”
ha
yo how many times this mans gonna fall asleep then wake back up, god damn XD
naruto is so in love he’s even setting this mans alarm so he wakes up i love it
having to sneak INTO class omg i’m dead. that certainly deserves some type of award
apocalypse WHY IS NARUTO SO RELATABLE. i swear to god i actually act like this when someone i have feelings for does literally anything
NARUTO YOU DUMB IDIOT HE WAS LITERALLY TRYING TO TALK TO TOU WHYD YOU RUN AWAY YOU PANZY
shit we on 3 boy what’s gonna happennnnnnn O.O
OHOO SHIT
SASUKE WHERE’D YOU COME FROM
AWWWWWWW WHAT!
how could they totally misunderstand each other like that my heart is BROKEN. that was painful
WE’VE REACHED ONE AHAHAHAHAHAAAAAAA WHATS GONNA HAPPEN WHATS GONNA HAPPEN I HAVE TO KNOWWWWWWW
wow sasuke REALLY made sure naruto knew where to be and when huh. ain’t no excuses
sasuke WOULD plan an itinerary for a f*cking chat i swear XD
i don’t know why but i really like the line “why are you pursuing this issue that obviously makes us both feel like utter crap?” like, i can think of a LOT of instances in life to actually hit someone with that
oh shit sasuke said PLEASE? oh look at that a pig just took flight AKGLAOGJAVFKALGG
*reader unable to respond right now, please check again later, preferably when the two main characters ARENT smooching
naruto’s response tho XD i’d probably react the same way tbh
ALGKAOGOAHRKHSLAPG
WHY ARE YOU DOING THIS TO ME RIGHT NOW I AM LITERALLY HUNGOVER AND CANT TAKE THIS LEVEL OF STEAMINESS IN THE MORNING STOPPPPPP BUT DONT STOPPPPP AGHHHHHH
imperfect positions mean nothing when it’s the perfect person you’re kissing.
it’s okay naruto literally NO ONE blames you for not being able to control yourself around the walking SEX magnet that IS sasuke uchiha. just shocked you lasted this long honestly
zero.
andddddd . . .
onto next chappie~
you’re amazing. your writing is wonderful. i realize i haven’t really been commenting on that but i can tell that you got comfortable with the story and the characters and it makes everything flow very nicely. my only thought is that i’m worried this story isn’t finished so when i get to chapter 19 it’s just gonna be cliffhanger city but i guess we’ll see

i can’t believe this either o.O
he actually TOLD sasuke how he felt about him?! naruto DOES have some balls, look at that
the response (or lack thereof) is honestly . . . about what i was expecting, but that doesn’t mean i WANTED it to go like thatjust waiting for them to realize they’re each other’s life partner
it’s fine, it’s fine, everything’s fine
next chappie to give me some life during my lunch break ~