Reviews for Psychonauts What If? Issue 1
GothicRainbows1415 chapter 1 . 10/13/2010
Keep going, I like this, write more, What will happen to Lili? What will happen to Raz?
gemstone11 chapter 1 . 10/9/2007
continue plz
Darth Avery chapter 1 . 8/9/2006
XD Smon. You're lucky you get comments. my fictions have been all forgotten. I would update them, but you know, president bush.

I love that you can blame anything these days on the adminstration.
xvjafhafg.a chapter 1 . 8/7/2006
Oh-me-oh-my, me (Mayhem), Psychonaut Madz (Pyro), KarAniyuki (Cheez) now you and Mashi! It's like everyone at RD forums has a FF account now. 'Kay, as Vocabulor, there weren't any grammar or spelling issues I could find. BUT...it did feel rushed and could have benifitted from some more detail. Many scenes were 'told' instead of 'shown', and showing makes actiony scenes more compelling. Work on that and you will have a quality fic on your hands. I do appluad you on the concept though, unique and prepped to be a LOL read. Now, head to the local forums and start making it random!
Kitsubasa chapter 1 . 8/6/2006
Whoa. This is funny. For some reason, it makes think of something my friend said to me.

"It aint a lizard, it's a charmeleon!"

The less said about that, the better.

GOOD JOB!
MashiTheInsane chapter 1 . 8/6/2006
That whole "Congestica" thing made me laugh for a few minutes straight.

Hooray for What If's! *Story Alert'd!*