I enjoyed this throughly and the ONLY thing I would change would be the ending. I would have liked if naruto died in the end but that’s just my personal opinion.

Ever heard of a fucking comma? They go before names in dialogue? They help break up dialogue, making it seem like real people are talking. They help break up your shitty run-on sentences, too. Retard.

I think it’s extremely annoying how Jiraiya still hasn’t told naruto who is father is considering that he’s “dying” like really? He doesn’t know how much time naruto has left to live and he still doesn’tell Him?! Naruto has had no relatives his whole life and to not tell him about his parents , Jiraiya would’ve basically let naruto die without telling him who his parents were but we all know he isn’t gonna die

Such a great story. *claps*

The last time I cried was when a person close to me died but at the end of this chapter I also couldn't help but pick a few tears away. I thank you for an amazing story thus far.

I'd be honest, I really like this story at first...
But the pregnancy thing is just...well anyway sp far it's good but after the exam it seems kind of rushed(?)
Why is Naruto so easily beaten by Deidara by just one explosion? I mean, I think we haven't seen the result of his training yet. Where was all that powerful justsus and tactics? x,,D
Well I already read the Madara part and at least he beat him...

I always find the idea of "the bijuu died if its jinchuriki died" kinda dumb. I mean if it's true why no one have ever try to eliminate the jinchurikis to get rid of the threat that the bijuus are ? Apart for Gaara and its automatic defense, the others were easy kills when they were young. And that means that no jinchuriki have ever died on a mission or something ? Well that's convenient...

Well this was interesting so it seems everyone is gonna know the Naruto has the Kyubi in him well minus Team 7 but does Sakura know already and I wonder what she'll do when she finds out and I wonder how Naruto will fair against Pein

Well that was interesting so Naruto's leaving on his own a silly plan but when is anything Naruto does not insane

no offense but i've got say this ruined the story for me and i won't continue to read. why does this ''pregnancy twist'' happen in every other story? boring.

That's a cool set of exams.

That scene was hot. Wonder if there are more in the story.

Amazing piece of work here! Loved it. Only down side was the amount of usage of the word "whilst" but you fixed that lol. i applaud this work!

Sooooo good! Considering that you wrote this about ten years ago when there was very little info on Akatsuki, your imagination was quite exceptional :) I loved reading it!

man Deidara is so boring and weak and such a coward I mean a baby could beat him I hope Naruto rips him to pieces as well as Tobi/Obito because there both pathetic jokes anyway