Reviews for He love me not her |
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![]() ![]() ![]() no offence but i agree with DegrassiLoverForLife, kmonty, butterflyKisses26, and everyone else who agrees. You have to make it into a REAL story. vince wouldn't just push Robin into a dumpster and Robin wouldn't just punch Holly for no reason. I know that you have the potential to write a story. You just need a lot of help on this. and next time, try and make it more realistic. like something that would happen on the show. if you keep writing your stories like this, your gonna get flamed a lot. so i suggest you get to work on your writing skill. |
![]() ![]() ![]() so cute holly and vince 4 ever |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm sorry, but this wasn't exactly much of a story. It's more of a general idea. Vince would never push a girl into a dumpster. Plus they wouldn't get a restraining order on Robin, because she wasn't technically doing anything to them, she just liked Vince. Things like that happen all the time. You don't get a restraining order about it. This story needs A LOT of work. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh my gosh... I... look, this is really unrealistic. I'm sorry, that's just how I feel. |
![]() ![]() ![]() sorry but this is no story its more like a basic concepte it needs alot of work. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I dont care how you end it, I just want you to update soon! :} |
![]() ![]() ![]() doncha just love holly and vince? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Okay, even more interesting. Update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Short beginning, but anyway I love it. Please continue soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() great story! plz continue! |
![]() ![]() ![]() i agree, i think you may have some good ideas, but its not really a story. i think that only insesitive jerks flame people so i'm not trying to offend you, but that's just my opinion. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I don't mean to sound rude or anything, but are you serious? I was reading this "story" and I, though I don't believe in flaming people, I was seriously tempted to just write a flame about this. But I won't. Instead, I will offer you some constructive criticism. The one big piece of advice I can give you is this: If you're going to post a story, make sure it's a STORY. A story with a premise, maybe even a subplot, and chapters and everything that a real story has. Remember, if you keep posting stuff like this, people are just going to flame you- the people who have reviewed so far have been VERY nice in thier reviews. If you seriously want to write then please try and refrain from doing stories- and I use that term loosely- like this one. You are only making a mockery of something that is very special to me. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Interesting. More soon? |
![]() ![]() ![]() um...short and did'nt really understand it, Robin and vince where working together so why would they have a restraining order...but I wanna see where this goes |
![]() ![]() ![]() Umm...kinda short...and it's true, Vince would never dump a girl in a dumpstyer...and even thought they have a restraining oreder, Robin wasn't precisely hurting them...ah well. :)Bee |