Reviews for Christian's revenge.
Silverium chapter 4 . 7/28/2003
Hey, I'm so happy you chose to write this, I haven't played OMF for ages, but I adored the game and its characters, actually, reading this fic has inspired me to locate the game online and get it back. Jaguar's my favourite 'bot, I love the concussion cannon and the overhead throw.
Nac Ni A Maps chapter 1 . 5/24/2002
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Nac Ni A Maps chapter 1 . 5/24/2002
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greeneyes6 chapter 4 . 3/6/2002
Please write more! Christian is my first love! *_*

Please go more into detail for the fights if you can. thanks!
greeneyes6 chapter 4 . 3/6/2002
Please write more! Christian is my first love! *_*

Please go more into detail for the fights if you can. thanks!
greeneyes6 chapter 4 . 3/6/2002
Please write more! Christian is my first love! *_*

Please go more into detail for the fights if you can. thanks!
greeneyes6 chapter 4 . 3/6/2002
Please write more! Christian is my first love! *_*

Please go more into detail for the fights if you can. thanks!
Hawkye chapter 4 . 10/9/2001
Good start. Add a bit more detail to the fights, and you should be fine. Keep it up. (Bah, I shouldn't be writing reviews at 4 AM :)
Shinjai chapter 4 . 9/18/2001
Nice, one of the few decent fics in this category. Keep Going!
Hurricane chapter 1 . 9/13/2001
this sux. im sorry but its true. there is so litlle feeling in this "story" it could have come straight out of the manual. i think it did actually. oh and werd to the wise ppl dont talk like that. sorry if you feel bad about this but the truth hurts.
KEVCOO chapter 4 . 7/14/2001
It was great i used to have the game One must fall. I love beaten' the game.
Amber Dawn chapter 4 . 7/6/2001
Where to begin, where to begin...I don't mean to put you down, to "flame" you, or to make you feel like crap. But this is the sorriest excuse for a fanfiction I've seen to date. This bit of words-on-a-screen should be taken off for plagarism, or atleast the first chapter. It was taken STRAIGHT from the manual, and that's just low. The chapters are too short. You don't leave your reader wanting more, you just leave them like..."okay...so...now what?". You constantly spelled Crystal's name wrong. Most people don't notice that, but it bugs me. Especially when the names are spelt in the manual. The fighting should be a bit more elaborate. You don't have to go all-out and make a big deal out of it, but try writing in paragraphs. And finally, please, get a beta-reader. The spelling, grammer and dialect is *appaling*. I do, however, commend you for the basic idea behind this. With a little work, this could be a killer fic. Just keep it in mind.
Luke Rounda chapter 4 . 6/15/2001
This is not a story. This is a timeline of events. Think up a story and try again.
Luke Rounda chapter 3 . 6/15/2001
Sparse writing, sparse description, writer-to-reader communication needs serious tinkering. Another thing: people don't talk this way. It's painfully obvious that it's being done to reveal plot elements, whatever those might be. If you're going to resort to this, at least do it with a little tact.
Luke Rounda chapter 2 . 6/15/2001
Hmm. Where to begin. You need some improvement, m'lad. We'll start with the "15 years of training" bit. If Christian is 23, as you've stressed enough already, that means he started training to fight robots at age 8. The next big thing is that there is nothing about this story that is distinguishable from the game, except that *I'm not playing*. The "story" is lost somewhere. Your characters are flat, the emotional levels are sterile, and your fight scene, the place that in a fanfic about a game like OMF that should be rich with description and tension, is outright boring. Try using some adjectives. Last thing - I doubt Christian should be surprised to be fighting Crystal. He's the pilot - he should know what tournament he signed up for, and as brother and sister who both fight in the Arena, they should know that there will be times that they'll be forced to fight. THAT WAS PART OF CHRISTIAN'S MOTIVATION, to knock Crystal out of competition for the Ganymede management position, because he was afraid for her life. And that brings one last point - what timeframe are we talking about here? Before or after the WAR tourney to decide the Ganymede spot? After the Ganymede position was filled, robot fighting became a sport and new tournaments sprouted up. You need to be aware of your history before you write.
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