Reviews for Bitterness
Evil Riggs chapter 1 . 4/19/2007
Somewhat daunting chapter length, but so far I endorse this product and/or service.
Bishopx chapter 6 . 2/2/2007
I can never get enough of this. You have this mastered down to a science. I can't wait to read more.
GoldAngel2 chapter 6 . 2/1/2007
Who, another cliffhanger, eh Freddo?

You must love the old saw about bad pennies showing up-and what better way than in an embittered star academy reject renagade who has a grudge he's nursing to be possessed by the yet to die spirit of the Dark Lord-ol' Ekogaru himself. Are you planning to have a reunion with Yvonna the plastic clone in some sick rutting session?

And that line about the dead cultists-Roland LeMay's famous line about the smell of a new car from "Christine" "No better GD smell in the world...except for pussy." Too funny.

The scene with Deke alone on Christmas Eve was heartwrenching-proving to me again that guys aren't as bullet-proof as they want everyone to think... and Sasha's one girl from who he won't be able to hide his feelings-and who is ready, willing and able to help him finally move on...

The relieving of pent up passions shows that both are feeling the pain. And I loved the girl-talk between Aunt Nova and Sasha that had a timely interruption by a very hungry Derek..

Now the stage is set for the next battle-I can't wait.

BTW as of today my book is offically on sale on your announcement in the mail.
GoldAngel2 chapter 5 . 2/1/2007
Another totally absorbing chapter, Freddo...

Deke really needs to snap out of it-seriously, let GO for corn's sake-Dawn is GONE, time to move on...However...

Sasha's little visit then her psonic trance may just be what he needed to do just that-he got really scared when she zoned out and joined Nova's battle with Yvonna the nut bar crazy lady-maybe he'll begin to allow concern for her deepen into something like what Paul and Alicsea have...

And speaking of Yvonna, the cockroach that never dies...she is one bi-polar piece of work-even for a clone. She's so bent on vengeance that she'll put those serving her in mortal danger-a meglomaniac in the truest sense-but I'm glad that true vengeance will be dealt to her by the Holy One above as prophesied by Starsha.

And that Derek-what a space cowboy as Steve Miller once sang-He's lucky he didn't get his (and Sandor's) collective heinies blown off-but I'm sure his will get chewed off by one Mrs. Wildstar whaen he gets back to the Argo...

Off to chapter 6-what a treat to get two chapters in a row!
GoldAngel2 chapter 4 . 1/9/2007
Hey there Freddo -Happy New Year to you and Gail and I'm glad to see another chapter from your ongoing saga...

First why is it men always cling to the women who treat them like target practice and break their hearts...while a good and decent woman that wants to help heal their bullet holes gets hit in the crossfire while they go back for more? Deke needs to truly make a clean break from Dawn, once and for all, deligating her to the past so he can move on or he'll never be happy-and Sasha may just find someone else, so he'll lose all over again...

That flashback to the fight with Nova and Yvona the nutbar was as vivid the second time as it was the first-and reminded me of the demon spawn waiting in the wings. I loved the reference to where Yvona truly ended up and her cry of "Eloi Eloi lama Sabachthami" and the Lord's response-a chilling reminder to me at least that of all the accolades we receive here for what we do, it is all found wanting unless it serves Him genuinely with no thought of self...that's why I love when committed Christians like yourself write pieces like this-an imaginative story with a very clear message as to whom is on the Throne..and who will judge all...

The last scene had me uneasy as the precarious alliance with Desslock appeared to be in jeopardy as the SMITE weapon's use brought back bitter reminders to Derek that the Gamilons had killed his family and were once his most loathed enemies...but it looks as if the hatchet is buried again-but for how long? And finishing up with a scuffle between Venture and Wildstar gave an amusing dose of "boys will be boys" as the women (as usual) went to have coffee and laugh at their spouses-at least until the enemy showed up...

Great job, Freddo-and keep it up.

BTW I did a Christmas one-shot for Rurouni Kenshin that I hope you can check out-I think you'd like it.
GoldAngel2 chapter 3 . 11/1/2006
So, so sorry I didn't review this sooner, as you probably guessed I've been quite busy with "The Gleaning Time",doing corrections for the first draft and finishing all the artwork while my computer's been showing its age (it's 7 years old-a dinosaur by today's standards)...anyway enough excuses...

The meeting with Dawn and Hardy looks to bring major complications-she's still the love of Deke's life and he definitely will not appreciate ol' JD muscling in on his girl...even though he's now developing a thing for Sasha...some fireworks ahead I see...

That aside, I loved the slice of marital bliss you served up between the Wildstars-especially the playful part of foreplay leading up to their coupling-but that dream seems to have freaked Derek out and rightfully so. I'm glad Nova continues to be the voice of reason and his refuge in times of doubt about the uncertainties of their future...after all, they could die at anytime, together.

The appearence of Aliscea's image on the Argo bodes ominously for the crew as it seems that she and Mark's vessel is in danger-from Invidia perhaps?

I'll be eager to see the next chapter...

Great work as always, Freddo-and thanks for the review of "Darkest Hour"-now that my artwork is nearly done, I can concentrate on finishing both that and "Race to Save the World" (I'm digging that story out of mothballs)
GoldAngel2 chapter 2 . 8/18/2006
Well another victory for the Argo/Yamato and her comrades-and to the victors go the spoils as the cadets found out-all being given commissions as officers in the Earth Forces...

But I wonder...what root of bitterness has taken hold? Is it Sasha's baptism by fire (literally) as she is now a warrior, having taken enemy lives...something that will have adverse effects I'm sure, like those suffered by any person forced into war...

Deke sure is exhultant-and still can forget Dawn who I'm sure would not be as thrilled...

Another awesome story here, my friend.

And my art muse has been more active of late-creating illustrations for "The Gleaning Time" instead of writing.
GoldAngel2 chapter 1 . 8/18/2006
It's always a treat when a great storyteller returns from a long hiatus...and as usual you didn't disappoint...

The attack by the Comentine forces was unexpected but the penchant for crowing over their assumed victories prematurely continue to be their downfall-Samara's declaration of victory became his death knell...

I see that Aliscea and Paul as well as Venture are still MIA-I hope they aren't dead-Aliscea's psonic powers will be needed in this new battle unless she protects from where they are, behind the scenes like a silent partner...

The young cadets are getting their first taste of interplanetary battle and I get the feeling that the young guns are up for the task...

Glad to see the Argo back in form-and I still think of it as the Yamato

Great work Freddo, as usual.