Reviews for A Konoichi's Heart
narutojazz19 chapter 15 . 3/10/2008
ahahaha how embarrissing
narutojazz19 chapter 10 . 3/10/2008
waho go naruto
narutojazz19 chapter 4 . 3/10/2008
this was really well done
narutojazz19 chapter 1 . 3/10/2008
wow great story!
kaptin-hippy chapter 2 . 1/9/2008
Seems like a good story and the grammar is even half-way decent. However, your over use of japanesse is quite irritating. Most fan-fiction authors use some, when appropriate, but you seem to use the words you know when ever the opportunity arises. Just by changing that, your story would be a lot better.
prestojazz chapter 18 . 11/26/2007
WOW this is amazing, I just wanted to know if you were still updating this story and if you were when the next posting will be. Thanks
JustWriter2 chapter 18 . 9/22/2007
(sweatdrops) Um, most of the Japanese words you've been using in the middle of the sentences don't belong there. Also, 'matte,' means wait, so it doesn't make sense to use it in a farewell. You could use, "Ja!," for informal use and, "Ja ne," for a slightly more formal way, like for an acquaintance that isn't above or below you. Or, you could just use, "Sayonara," which means, "Until we meet again."

I just thought that you should know.

-JWchan -
Sonic0815 chapter 2 . 8/7/2007
Please decide if you want to write in japanese or english. Honorifics are fine, but what you are doing right now is more or less butchering both languages at the same time - and it looks like a bloodbath :-)

Nevertheless, nice start so far. Poor Yugito, though...
aznispolly chapter 3 . 7/31/2007
dude you need to fix ur habit of putting japanese words into every single instance such as “In this case. Hai you can. Cloud is no place for a Hyuuga least of all one form the main house! Now come on!” .. why can u just freaking say yes isnt of hai? since ur typing in english use them OCCASIONALLY not every freaking instance! its getting annoying! its really starting to discourage me to even keep reading..
BlackRoseFire chapter 18 . 4/4/2007
AWESOME! Please write more. This story is very very good.
Cybergades chapter 18 . 3/14/2007
Well so far the story is going great. i like the Origional Character and the relationships between the Hyuga and Naruto and the OC are really interesting as well which really add some spice to the story. throwing Akatsuki into the mix just added even more entertainment to the story. it seems like there is ALOT of angels you can play with this story and i am looking for to see an update soon.

keep up the great work. it is an amazing story so far and im sure things will continue to pick up from here on.

oh an ofcourse keep up the Naru/Hina fluff cause it is clearly the greatest pairing of all times.
braindamage730 chapter 1 . 2/27/2007
great story cant wait till u up dated
bob246 chapter 18 . 2/6/2007
i like this story and i cant wait for u to keep coming out with chapter i like the direction that ur going with it good shit
IronNaruto chapter 18 . 1/18/2007
this story is getting boring because i only see it about asamiya anyway don't expect getting anymore reviews because if the next chapter is like this one i don't want to read it damn kangaroos hopping and kicking people
Quietshade chapter 18 . 1/18/2007
oh, I was hopping some action between miya a kakashi but this party is going to be fun.
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