|Reviews for Alternatives|
| MelodiousNocturnesDreamgaia chapter 1 . 4/14/2012
finally what really happened when they fade and a happy ending wonderful job lol
| WolfyMcClowd chapter 10 . 1/10/2011
PLease continye, this is awesome
| Sora Tayuya chapter 10 . 7/9/2010
I digress...it was rather good. For a after-life-KHII fling.
It was good. You have a very nice writing style, and on that, I compliment you. Good storyline.
| XxXGlitzXxXandXxXGlamXxX chapter 9 . 7/7/2010
NEVER. DO. THAT. AGAIN.
I was sitting here ready to bawl my eyes out because Demy died and 'cause Axel lost him. P
| Chaotic Memory chapter 10 . 4/24/2010
I don't think I reviewed this, which is an utter shame considering that it got me into AkuDemy. I actually really liked the plot (Which rarely happens when I'm reading Au fics) and loved the In Characterness. I'm most likely going to re-read this again later...
| animearlinefreak chapter 10 . 6/26/2009
this is cute and I am glad someone did a long Axel/Demyx story. Thank you!
| Polish chapter 6 . 2/20/2009
-THUD!- Uh...-fell out of seat for the second time today at reading this fic. Dude...Vexen had a kid...trippy...dude...so trippy, yet its totally ironically hilarious!
| Polish chapter 4 . 2/20/2009
This chapter was oddly reminiscent of I am legend with the dog called Sam, being killed by those things towards the end of the movie... I like this fic alot, its really good!
| StealerofSporks chapter 10 . 1/19/2009
NO! This was way to short! Oh well, it was still one of the best stories I've read. The concept was interesting, and you wrote it superbly. My only problem is that there was virtually no character development. Like Dark Seraphim, I thought that a bunch of things were skipped over, and a lot of depth was gone from the story. It was way to fast, and it had the potential to be stretched out over 30 chapters, instead of 10. I'm not going to make this very long, since Dark Seraphim also seems to have said almost exactly what I was thinking. I loved the story though, even if it did have some things missing!
| StealerofSporks chapter 2 . 1/19/2009
HAHAHAHAHAHA! I was reading this story, and my mom's in the same room, and when I get to the part where the bible pusher is going "Have you found Jesus?", I laughed SO hard! Of course, it earned me a strange look, but it was still hilarious. Well, I love the story so far! The concept is a very interesting one, and now I need to read more!
| DucttapedCheshireCat chapter 10 . 9/17/2008
what a sweet little story :3
interesting twist i gotta say.
| demyxfan chapter 10 . 8/15/2008
This story was so awesome! Red it on one sitting! I love this! XD One of the best things was that it was hilarious once in a while, not to forget that it was purely AkuDemy and that's my fave pairing! Hope you'll write more about AkuDemy.
| Cupe chapter 10 . 7/1/2008
Aw, I just read all of that. So sweet and beautoful!
I loved how all the dead Organisation became friends in the end.
| Rastaban Bright chapter 10 . 5/21/2008
All throughout this story you made some of the best (and hilarious) calls ever. XD
I will be using the 'have you found Jesus?' 'No. How long's he been missing?'
ADN gives you luv hearts :D
| Dark Seraphim chapter 10 . 4/25/2008
I've been kind of waffling a bit about whether or not I should say anything because this is such an old fic and quite a bit of what I say IS going to be on the critical side.
While this fic is enjoyable and has some good points, one thing that kept running through my head was "Good idea, poorly executed." And I say this because it was clearly a rush job. Anytime you have a fic, even an AU, set on Earth, there has to be a lot of thought put into it and I honestly don't think you did that. Yea, it's only fanfic, but it seemed obvious to me that you were so intent on getting to the "candy bar" scenes(action/smex), that other things simply weren't considered or it rang of "how convenient".
Before I go on, I'll give the good points: Characterization(especially Demyx), dialogue, you hit a kink of mine(favorite characters driving), it's not easily forgettable, and it's a "page turner" sort in that people really do want to see what happens because they CARE.
Now for the bad: Things went way too quickly, too easily, too fast. Something like "Heartless" attacking is not going to get swept under the rug, especially since schools/public areas are attacked. The media, the police and even government forces(like the FBI) are going to want to know what's going on, and they have ways of finding out given the magnitude of the attacks and the situation. I don't think that was even thought of much, and including them in more than just in passing would have added an extra dimension to the story. Plus, it would have given other Organization members a chance to be involved instead of just being forgotten(Xigbar, Lexeaus, Saix, Xaldin, etc).
If Heartless are attacking people ON THE STREET, then you can bet that every single government organization WILL BE INVOLVED whether Axel/Demyx like it or not. It's just not going to "go away". You DO mention police, etc, but I feel that it was "oh, them, blabla" dismissive, and I feel that you failed to consider that the police/media WILL go after Axel/Demyx because they WERE involved in fighting off the attacks.
Sorry, but the idea that the children won't be believed because of "traumatic psychosis" just isn't going to fly, especially since other people had to have been wondering what was going on, from the noise, and kids aren't always as gullible or stupid as people think. Not to mention some people WILL believe the children, and will not invalidate them or dismiss them. Yea, strange powers are hard to believe, especially in a world without magic, but if enough people saw it, then it won't be so easily waved off. Plus, there's no way that everyone in that vicinity was simply "hallucinating" from trauma, and wouldn't that apply to Axel/Demyx too? It's much more complicated than just "well, unfortunately for them, and fortunately for us". BUT, it would show that Demyx is rather cocky/a little too optimistic, and I do like that.
The fact that they left for New York would only further arouse suspicion, especially since the cops/FBI can be very cynical, and FBI is more mobile than the Denver PD. And, of course, the media will hound this, and reporters can be very aggressive for a "scoop".
One more thing, the "traumatic psychosis" theory CAN blow up in Demyx's face. If the FBI/Police detectives suspect that it was all a set up or bad guys/bad guys scenario, then why should they believe the kids should they say that "Demyx/Axel" are heroes? Something to think about there. Heh.
I just felt like it was "all too easy", and it eliminated any additional depth that this fic could have had. I really didn't like the Deus ex Machinas, even if the Roxas one was touching. As for the Demyx one, well, I felt like more action could have added there. Maybe another driving scene? Hee!
Yea, I know I sound like I'm tearing this piece to shreds, but I've said a lot more about this fic than others because I felt like it had a lot of potential, and I DID enjoy the fic, but there were some elements that simply jarred me, and it really did ruin the enjoyment somewhat.
I wanted to get it all out because, like I said, I really do like this fic, and feel like it could have been better had it been more carefully planned out.
I hope this was helpful, and I hope to see more Axel/Demyx from you sometime, especially since 358/2 will be out soon. Thanks for reading all this.