|Reviews for Independence Variable|
| Iawen Londea chapter 1 . 3/14
I just realized I never reviewed this fic so here I am to make it right! For years this has been one of my favorite, and most reread, Numb3rs fics. Whenever I'm looking for a great Hot Shot missing scenes fics, I always turn to this story. As far as I'm concerned everything that happens in this fic is canon lol.
I loved how you showed the team arriving at the scene, clearing the house and finding Don. Seeing their worry for him was just more icing on the cake.
The scene where Charlie drives to the hospital while Alan is muttering, "Don't Let him die" is so heartbreaking. I feel for them both. You did a great job driving home their worry and alarm they would have felt by Megan's call.
The final scene with Don being exasperated by Charlie refusing to leave was so in character for both Eppes brothers. Great job
| wotumba1 chapter 1 . 1/5/2018
| aprykot chapter 1 . 3/11/2017
I like how every time I'm ready to review a story, I get logged out all of sudden without my notice. *Laughs*
Anyways. This is a really nice missing moment for the Hot Shot episode. Like someone had mentioned in their review, that it was disorienting to see Don in peril at first and then at home all of sudden with nothing in between. I'm glad you wrote this though. Thanks! I enjoyed this!
| Guest chapter 1 . 3/8/2013
Im a little bit behind and just reading through the stories! They definately needed a filler scene about this, some nice points, I like how you got the pin point pupils and respiratory depression correct, but he would have been given naloxone at the scene - its amazing as literally brings them straight round! (having given it to a drug overdose patient - is brilliant to watch!)
| Cutter12 chapter 1 . 4/4/2012
Like so many other fans of Numb3rs, I wanted more from that episode. This story filled in the missing scene quite nicely. :)
| Darkgirl5 chapter 1 . 12/19/2010
This is great. I loved this episode, but I felt like I wanted more. The moments between the Eppes boys (and dad) were my favorite part of NUMB3RS. I thought the writers missed a chance for more great scenes in this episode. You filled the gap beautifully.
Thanks for sharing.
| CD57 chapter 1 . 3/12/2009
good job! liked this...
| MeShelly chapter 1 . 2/8/2008
Aw, that was very sweet, and I think it slides into the episode's events quite well. I always thought it was a little jarring to see Don go down, and then a minute later, we see him just fine, with no transition despite a potentially fatal occurrence.
"It was the weakest cough Charlie had ever heard." I really liked how Charlie's anxiety is apparent throughout the entire fic (and remembering about the possibility of diazepam in Don's system), culminating in the development of that question (with Don's unwitting nudge).
"You...okay...?" I loved that line; I think it's an amazing mark of Don's focus on the safety of others. He can barely talk, and knows he's in the hospital, but it just *has* to be for someone else.
I enjoyed reading this, as I have your other works (and responses)-thank you for sharing.
| Mell Yeah chapter 1 . 1/5/2008
Awesome! I like the Charlie and Don interaction, and the way Don's team insisted on being the ones to go in after him. Very nice. I love missing scene fics. You did a great job on this.
| TasteinMenandWomen chapter 1 . 8/7/2007
That was great. I did wonder about the hospital scene and I like the way that you imagined it.
| 3rdgal chapter 1 . 4/9/2007
Well shoot. Apparently I wasn't very good about reviewing a while back. I remember reading this and loving it but I have no idea why I didn't review. So let me say it now - great job! Nice brother moment there at the end and great job of keeping both brothers in character so well. :)
| celadon chapter 1 . 8/27/2006
I loved this one, too. Another protocol note on Don entering the house alone: he had already radioed and found his team in active pursuit. He had every reason to believe that Yates was the one they were pursuing and that he was therefore otherwise occupied and that Lindsay was the worst he could be up against. He had no way of knowing that Lindsay and Yates had made the switch.
| Mel J1701 chapter 1 . 8/26/2006
Excellent story! There isn't enough Don h/c out there so it's great to find another story to add to the few.
I loved the interaction between the team as they rally around Don. But what was best about this story was the very accurately portrayed independent streak of Don, even when he's half-dead, and Charlie's almost pained empathy for a brother he knows is too self-sufficient for his own good (no doubt growing up in the shadows of a child prodigy contributed to that).
You definitely have a talent for 'Numb3rs' fic and I hope to see more fics from you soon!
| dHALL chapter 1 . 8/26/2006
I could really see this as a missing sequence.
Your portrayal of Don's team was right on!
Good job and I'm looking forward to reading more of your work!
| sashapet02 chapter 1 . 8/26/2006
I've read this before but can't remember if I reviewed. So here it is...
That is the scene that should have been in the episode!
Perfect. Thankyou for filling that gap.