|Reviews for Godchild|
| NeilDingley chapter 9 . 8/16
Great story, hope you continue it! PPMS!
| Matthew Regent chapter 9 . 7/15
A truly excellent work, actually keeping Shinji and co in character while progressing the story in a different way from canon is very rare and appreciated.
Of particular note; perhaps the first Arael battle where humanity earns their victory, mutiple points where it actually seemed that humanity had no manner of defeating the angel then one or more of the pilots get up and keep the fight going. What makes it impressive however is that each time is done so reasonably, without any 'Tengen Toppa' nonsense/AT field magic/hot blooded plot device rubbish that renders all conflict moot in favor of the power of friendship/super special protagonist powers. The closest being that Unit 01 can apparently use the Lance in a way that was never seen before int he series, but given that it only gives humanity a fighting chance and avoids Shinji magically forcing his way through the mind rape beam that toppled the much stronger Asuka in cannon, it is not a problem.
My only problem so to speak would be that while Arael was more impressive in combat terms, the image of him/it scurrying across the ground on tiny legs with it's wings trailing behind it was quite humorous to me and broke the tension at several points. Given that no one else seems to have brung this is up however, it appears to be merely a personal irritation.
Unit 00 appears to be the only functional Evangelion left after Unit 02's skewering x100 and Yui's orbital faceplant, so thus Rei remains as the only viable pilot. An interesting proposition to see just how the final battles would play out in this scenario where Asuka is presumably catatonic again and Unit 00 still has to fight the same Angel that destroyed it in cannon.
I presume of course that Unit 01 will be at the very least out of commission for some time due to the aforementioned re-entry even with AT field magic, and that Shinji will at the very least have to spend some time in the core again to explain any survival. If you do continue this fic I would advise either keeping Shinji dead or having him otherwise suffer in exchange for keeping him alive after that performance.
The key to drama is consequences, without it all that buildup simply fizzles and is rendered pointless. I would much rather read of Rei dealing with Shinji's demise/decorprialisation round 2 and Asuka's mental breakdown than Shinji magically walking around without issue and Asuka having magically 'gotten over' the breakdown that finished her in series.
Of course given the time period since the last update this is all moot. However I have enjoyed everything up to this point, and can say this was more worth my time than a hundred fanfics of lesser quality.
Thank you for your contribution.
| N chapter 9 . 5/31
O god dangit, why do i keep reading awesome but incomplete stories that were updated eons ago. And it was starting to get real good. It is unlikely to work but (in singing tenore voice) ~pleeease updaaaAAAaaaateeee~ you know you waaant to don't leave us hanging when its bangiiiing~!
anyhow just in case, good writing would like to see more.
| kostigan chapter 1 . 4/30
I just recently watched the show and your characterization of Rei, Shinji and their relatioship is just beautiful. It's been awhile but I hope you'll return to this one day.
| xxxrae97xxx chapter 9 . 4/14
Holy fucking shit. How is this soo good, this last fight was just absolutely fucking insane and amazingly written. Holy fuck I need more of this fic.
| Grz chapter 9 . 2/16
brilliant story, It feels very grounded, and none of the characters seem OC, hope that you choose to continue the story
| Screaming With Your Mouth Shut chapter 9 . 2/10
This is an absolute gem. How did I not discover this sooner?
| g6-music chapter 9 . 2/7
Phenomenal storyline. EXCELLENT writing. I'm LOVING this! Although...I wouldn't mind an ending ;)
| The Last Rising Of The Phoenix chapter 9 . 7/23/2014
| Uraharaisgod chapter 9 . 3/26/2014
Surprisingly VERY good, I wasn't expecting much when the title was "Godchild", I assumed his little change would make him some Gary Stu super powered *I can use AT Fields* b.s, but the title is incredibly misleading as Shinji is nowhere even near being *God*-like.
Instead, I'm truly surprised to find an intrinsic look into the idea of what really could have happened in canon, real interaction and reaction, from Asuka's seeming mental breakdown to Shinji's sheer misery at the way he fcked everything up and his fear of abandonment and loneliness, coping with the changes his at first seemingly simple palate swap brought onto him.
The only thing I'm slightly surprised by is Shinji's sudden change in resolve, desperately throwing aside his desire to run and actually doing his (rather pitiful) best to try and correct what he screwed up. But it's a very welcome change, and handled really well. Rather than just a complete change to the aforementioned Stu persona, he still has his fear and indecisiveness, and is struggling just to have people believe in the sincerity of his wish to change.
Would have seriously looked forward to reading more on this!
| Halamee2559 chapter 9 . 12/20/2013
Well, I must say that this is the most impressive story that I had come across in a long time. The pacing is absolutely flawless, and one of the key strengths that you have nailed down pat, is the characters.
Yes, we know that Shinji's transformation is the main plot, but the best part of all is how you focus on the characters. Getting to see from Misato and Asuka's perspectives during Shinji's absence has a much more profound impact than simply letting the only cat out of the bag right from the get-go.
Not only that, but you also have a particularly strong grasp on introspective for Shinji himself. As he attempts to reintegrate with the world around him, after his very own identity has been stripped down to nothing, seeing him face the prejudice of strangers - not to mention loved ones - was something that is akin to how real society reflects towards people of different race, creed, religion.
To top it all off, everything in this story feels REAL. As in, if this fictional world and characters actually happened to exist, you made them believable. I've seen many a fanfic that can stray into the bounds of AU and fantasy a bit at times, but GodChild remains firmly rooted in the Evangelion universe.
Also, this entire last chapter is nothing short of awe-inspiring. Considering how the majority of the story is character-driven dialogue(which the show is too), seeing you write out a full length action sequence like this is rather mind-blowing, to say the absolute least.
So, in short - to say that this is the most pleasant "what if" story I have read in the longest time would be a woeful understatement. Hopefully, if you're out there reading this now, you will return here, someday.
As for me, I think I finally found the inspiration I needed to get writing again.
Thank you, so much.
| Ky chapter 9 . 10/11/2013
I couldn't speak for two hours after reading this. WOW. We need to put you in the fanfiction hall of fame.
| ezmegaz chapter 9 . 9/6/2013
Cool story. One of the few where Asuka manages to be a total bitch but with some pretty valid reasons. Too bad you ended it on a cliffhanger. Please continue.
| redkama chapter 7 . 7/10/2013
everything but the spelling in grammar is complete shit
| astrum agito chapter 9 . 7/2/2013
Great. I'd have to say, the scenario has changed ever since Eva refused to return Ikari Jr. Apparently, that caused the angel to become more active and attack more than just Asuka.
Great story, please update.