|Reviews for Broken Rose|
| Guest chapter 1 . 8/4/2012
I want the update :(((((((((((((((((((((((
| Keit0rin chapter 1 . 2/7/2007
Hwah. Nice, very nice! I like it! You ought to continue. :1
| PeanutButterOreoCookieGirl chapter 1 . 10/19/2006
gah! update soon!
| Robynn chapter 1 . 9/10/2006
I'm new to fanfiction, but I've been reading books for a long time. I can tell you that your paragraphs need a little formatting. They need spaces in between because it hurts my eyes to read them. Please don't take this the wrong way, I'm just offering a little critique. A new person speaking needs to be in a new line, after a space.
"You're" is short for "you are", "your" is the possessive form of "you".
"If your going to play with Blast..." should be "If YOU'RE going to play with Blast..."
and I think you're confused with your use of 's and plural forms. When you need to pluralize words, just add the S at the end without the apostrophe (') because 's indicates possession, not plurals.
You also had some typos (annoying, not annyoing) (let's, not lets) (knees, not knee's) (what's, not whats), but all around, you have potential.