|Reviews for Soul Voice|
| dreamlifter chapter 1 . 5/15/2007
really interesting new story idea, well written. looking forward to where you take things
| PomergranateNNAA chapter 19 . 5/11/2007
Sakura and Temari, friends? Well that'd be interesting.
Will Sakura or Naruto or both fight Gaara? Or maybe Temari will? (That's kinda random, sorry)
Fox girl is a good desription of Sakura. Do ya think her hair could have some red streaks as she grows older?
I like Jiraiya in this story. He comes off okay.
| Animako chapter 19 . 5/11/2007
I'm very, very impressed by your story. The premise is pretty original, and the execution of it is thoroughly thought-out and engagingly different to canon. Sakura's personality is believable, and makes for a good central character. The plot mostly avoids the normal cliches of AUs (following the original storyline with characters replaced) and even when it does follow that (Kakashi going missing, or Hinata in Team 7) the reasons for it work and it over-all adds to the plot. I like the idea of Sakura learning fuuinjutsu; apart from the irony, it adds interesting possibilties. It's also a nice way to continue her interaction with the Sandaime (now what'll happen if he dies...? *interested*).
The only possible criticism I have is that so far you've put Sakura in the position of having to kill someone twice now, without other character being able to do anything. The situation of their first mission was an strong and well-justified scenario (and Sakura's logical breaking-down of the seal good in that it was different from the overemotional fury attack thing that shows up in such anime...). In the second scene, though, there were several other ninja-folks around who you might have expected to be able to defend Ino. Maybe I just didn't read it carefully, but in any case I was going to say that while Sakura is the focus of the fanfic, she doesn't have the same hero-ly attitude that Naruto has (either the version in canon or here), and so putting her on the spot so too often might not be a good move.
The other thing is that it seems kinda strange that though Sakura evidently hasn't met Naruto's mother, none of the genin have thought of this as strange or awkward. Also, it seems to me that a conversation between Naruto and his mum on the topic of her would be an interesting thing, because it would allow for exploration of that whole issue from two sides that both hold strong opinions on the matter but who have conflicting interests. Also, Naruto's mum has guilt-issues and such, and those seem to need to be resolved.
Well, you probably considered that already. Kay.
Thanks for writing something so interesting!
(And if you want a beta-reader - though you seem to have no need of one if you don't already - I'd be happy to do so. :)
| Trapped in Icy Flame chapter 19 . 5/10/2007
It took me so long to review, life is kicking my ass right now. (*mutters* stupid school, stupid AP tests, stupid teachers) I think this chapter might be my favorite. Temari was very cool. Excellent chapter, well worth the wait!
| MissAX chapter 19 . 5/9/2007
yayy! a chapter that describes how sakura became friends with temari is something that most authors never write about...
PLEASE have SOME pairings! (GAA/SAKU *HINT HINT* NEJI/SAKU)
| Runespoor chapter 19 . 5/9/2007
Oh, I definitely didn't expect Temari to try and befriend Sakura. I'm a bit askared now, because of what happens in canon during the third test tournament - I don't want Sakura to get hurt and yet I'm not sure what I think about the possibility of a Sakura/Temari friendship.
The friendship between Ino and Sakura is somuchlove. And I mean somuch.
Jiraiya's introduction! It's great to see how Naruto's mother changed his first interaction/perception with the man - I think it'd be great if we got scenes of the three training with Jiraiya (I'll admit, I'm particularly interested in how Hinata could profit from his teachings; your Hinata is very much different from canon, but at the same time it's still the same character, just in other circumstances, which is great), but I'm not complaining with how you've been leading the story so far!
Sakura's reaction to Jiraiya's introduction - and the reason why she was terrified - was heart-breaking. I'm rather frightened regarding Sakura's loss of memory, because ack, no-one should have to live through a second 'first meeting' with Orochimaru, and Orochimaru and Kabuto are the king and emperor of mind-games, I dread what they could have in store if they learnt about it - I'm assuming Orochimaru is going to show up in person again at some point.
All a good kind of dread, though.
| Theteacher chapter 19 . 5/8/2007
NAruHina por favor
| Ryshuki chapter 19 . 5/8/2007
No. Waiting that long for such a good story is bad. I vote you write three more chapters in quick succession to make up for your sins.
I love this story. xD
| Shinobi Darkbeak chapter 19 . 5/8/2007
yay another chapter keep up the good work _
| cyrgon0 chapter 19 . 5/8/2007
Awesome-I really liked the introduction of Jiraiya, and how he automatically assumed that Naruto also liked the Icha Icha series. I wonder if we'll get a chance in the next few chapters to see a scene (or maybe an omake) in which Naruto's mother discovers that not only is Jiraiya back in town, but Naruto is training under him? (heh, I can see her trying to organize the jounin kunoichi to go after him if he does anything perverted...)
The section with Ino's mother and Sakura was done really well-I liked how you portrayed the gradual acceptance of Sakura first by Ino, then by her father, and now by her mother.
I'm just wondering-is there a chance that when Naruto, Hinata and Sakura grow older (and Sakura becomes a "fox-girl" in more ways than one) something might develop between certain members of the team? I mean, Hinata doesn't seem obsessed with Naruto at all, at least for now, and it would be rather ironic if there was a role-reversal between Naruto and Sakura compared to canon (but I'd think that this Naruto would be more accepting than canon-Sakura)...
Awesome chapter-it doesn't matter to us if updates are slow (though, it goes without saying that we'd enjoy faster updates), just as long as you're satisfied with the final product. Congrats on this amazing chapter-I hope that you get the chance to write more soon!
| Alba1 chapter 19 . 5/8/2007
I had been following this fic for a long time now. I love it. How you develop the story and stuff.
And at last I decided to leave a review to let u know. From now on I will comment. _ Keep it going.
| Turtle Kid the Woolgatherer chapter 19 . 5/7/2007
I'm glad that Temari is nice and that Jiraiya is also teaching Sakura. I was especially worried about that last one!
| Quathis chapter 19 . 5/7/2007
Liked Jiraiya's intro as well his attitude toward Sakura, very much like the old lecher.
Temari's appearance seemed to point to an alternative motive for being there, though I can only guess what that might be.
| JohnnyG chapter 19 . 5/7/2007
Nice chapter. Keep up the good work.
| gladdecease chapter 19 . 5/7/2007
Oh-ho! Jiraiya! Somehow, he completely slipped my mind when you referenced a new teacher to "warp Team 7's fragile little minds," as you put it.
I love your characterization of Jiraiya. He is just so...well. You know.
Actually, I really like your characterization of Temari too. Though I'm fairly certain she has a secondary reason for seeking out Sakura, it's nice to see her getting a friend in foreign places. Should anything go wrong soon, it's nice to have connections. *coughgaaraincanoncough*
Now, the main question for the chapter-WHY does Sakura not remember anything? Is it because she nearly died, and the brainpower normally used to store that memory was moved to more important functions (breathing, for example)? Or is that impossible, and is her memory loss tied to the Fox somehow? Hm...frankly, it's very puzzling.
Once again, I am overwhelmed by your amazing prose and characterization, on all fronts. I hope to see another chapter soon-maybe we'll get some answers to these ongoing questions of mine? Either way, I'll still enjoy it.