Reviews for Mistake |
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![]() ![]() This was truly, truly incredible. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oooof this is very good! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Harsh and cool |
![]() ![]() ![]() Did I really never review this? Years later, I return to it for inspiration. This and Kick Up Sand. Your descriptions are downright artistic. 'the silver line vanishing through the skin under a choker of crimson liquid.' I am in complete awe of your succinct imagery. I know this is Old but dear god, I hope you know your works are still adored and that you've continued writing in some form or another. You were talented when you wrote these, and I can only imagine you've gotten that much better. I'd believe it if you had become a published author. I'd also desperately want to read those books! All this to say, I really hope you're doing well! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Chilling...simply chilling... I liked the story, very well written. Even though it wasn't said it was Neji from the start, from clues we find out. Poor Neji...having to endure something so horrifying... And like a previous commenter, Inarae, this is the Naruto world I am sure is just behind the scenes...and the older ninja try to protect us from that horrible fact... |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was bloody awesome, very VERY nicely written. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This gave me chills. What is the title of the sequel? Is it available online? Again, excellent stuff! |
![]() ![]() ![]() What's the sequel called? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Guys! The Sequel is Kicking Up Sand! Just so you know ;) |
![]() ![]() ![]() This have a sequel? where? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow... That's kinda all I can say at the moment. Neji is my favorite character so to read that was somewhat depressing. Very well written. I've read some of your other work and you're very good. Keep it up. |
![]() ![]() ![]() loved it! (even though it's disturbing, but it fits 'cause it's a 'shinobi are tools' level of disturbingness and so that makes it an awesomely creepy yet amazing disturbingness) just wondering though... whats the companion piece? |
![]() ![]() ![]() This was fantastic! You write amazing stories! I loved how you made Neji sound a bit childish, but still had the intent to kill without quesiton |
![]() ![]() Okay,that was seriously disturbing |
![]() ![]() ![]() I just read through Nightingale again. It was too good to just sit waiting for the next chapter, so I decided to look at your other fics in hope of something related to Nightingale... This was well-written. It had less typos than Nightingale (which doesn't have many to begin with), it was immersive and it was intense. I really like your use of free indirect style. |