Reviews for Breathless
soda'slover chapter 1 . 8/18/2007
Very well written! Great story!
MewmewInuSailorHeart chapter 1 . 4/26/2007
Hahahahahaha now that was funny I feel sorry for the towls though they got soaked at least now they are safe from water splashing around from the boys "Exersizses"
SnowLion no Miko chapter 1 . 1/14/2007
Short, but really good. I enjoyed reading it. NejiSasu! _Keep up the good work!
jamie chapter 1 . 12/23/2006
it was good but i was kinda of short
Brooke chapter 1 . 12/19/2006
I loved it I just wished there was more.
xooxu chapter 1 . 12/4/2006
Nice, me likes. Faved.
FlurryDivider chapter 1 . 11/23/2006
hot sexy and funny at the end. just how i like them. _
The Alien From Outer Space chapter 1 . 9/19/2006
Cute...Point of view...from the towels...-_-
Bubblycola chapter 1 . 9/17/2006
oH MAN, THAT WAS SO FREAKIN HAWT! *DROOL* PLEASE CONTINUE! *Continues to drool at moniter*...
yukiislikesnow chapter 1 . 9/16/2006
Awesome! Too bad its a one-shot tho
hyper-writer14 chapter 1 . 9/12/2006
Heehee, the last line is funny...*cries* Those poor little towels! So neglected! OMG, I'm acting like an idiot again, lol.
Ultraviolet Lemur chapter 1 . 9/12/2006
This is really good. It has just enough to tantalize, but without too much detail, which if done badly (as it so often is) makes it seem cheesy. And the last line is a good way to break the tension.
xFalconessx chapter 1 . 9/10/2006
I got the towel thing, it was pretty clever. I liked the story, but a few words of advice, constructive criticism, whatever:

All that stuff at the beginning is really distracting and the time you completed it and don't need that. If people for some reason request it, I guess it's fine, but I was way too distracted and wasn't able to get into the story because it took too long to GET to the story.

Also, I don't know if this deserves an M rating...just thinking about's not really porn because all that happened was kissing and petting...if you full on lemon-ed it up, made it smut or something, I guess it could be M, but this doesn't quite make it...maybe that last part, insinuating he was getting anal would get the rating...but I don't think it's really porn without the full-on action description.

But other than the first, which is criticism, and the second, which is me ranting confusedly (ignore it if needbe XD), I really liked it, and I thought it was clever. Great job :)
Hola.Adios chapter 1 . 9/10/2006
I didn't get the part about the towels.