Reviews for Rules of the Game |
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![]() ![]() ![]() please update plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz this is so good and the worst cliffhanger everrrr |
![]() ![]() ![]() i love this story so much but please i know its been nearly 13 years but i need closure |
![]() ![]() ![]() That joke about Mr. Butts was good, my own last name is Buts btw. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Dumbledore is hella OC. He wouldn’t tell Harry to hand over his wand. And it isn’t dangerous. It just can hurt Voldemort while uses his brother wand. Like wtf? And Seamus being OOC is fricking annoying. Make it Draco. Jeez. Where’s Hermione? |
![]() ![]() ![]() I don’t like that Seamus is rude. I like Percy here. H3 better not turn into a jerk. |
![]() ![]() ![]() How the hell did Ron nit make the connection that the new kid was Harry Potter? Everyone knows he’s in their year and there’s only one Harry! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Harry doesn’t even have his wand yet. He better get Hedwig! Also, whoever went to the Dursley’s definitely would’ve realized that they were kyung about Harry running away. |
![]() ![]() This is one of the best fics I have ever read! Keep up the good work. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Love this story, the much more realistic 11 year olds, Sirius's attitude at the end, and more Just binge-read the whole thing! Following just in case you update anytime. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved reading what you have written so far. I hope that you will update again soon because I would love to read more and see where the story goes from here (chapter 38) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Love the kids wanting Harry to be safe and well. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I hope you update again, I rly want to see when this goes from here and what happens. Please update again I love the story so far |
![]() ![]() You have some truly excellent ideas and some unique plot twists that I am really enjoying. However, your English skills need some strict attention. One cat: cat. More than one cat: cats (NOT cat's). One Potter: Potter. More than one Potter: Potters (NOT Potter's). There are NO apostrophes in pluralizations. This is Primary School English you need to review. Belonging to one Potter: Potter's. Belonging to more than one Potter: Potters' (or Potters's). The possessive requires an apostrophe (with a few exceptions: his, hers, ours, theirs). Gryffindors, stairs, teachers, ideas: all plural, no apostrophes. Sometimes, in English, we change the word itself to make the plural: mice, men, wives, children, stories. Some words are also their own plurals: moose, fish. Cat’s paw, ministry’s policy (one policy of one ministry), ministries’ policies (more than one policy of more than one ministry), night’s sleep, harm’s way, Potters’ fortune: all possessive, all require an apostrophe. Keep writing! You can greatly improve your readability by paying more attention to every word you type. Thank you for your contribution to the world of Harry Potter Fan Fiction. |
![]() ![]() ![]() A very suspenseful way to end! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Don’t wizards immediately repair broken arms? Why is no e questioning this? |