Reviews for Unintentionally Yours
Devidakk chapter 10 . 8/13
So, Harry is rape victim, Voldemort lusts after him, because he is 'strong and beautiful' and he cries every few chapters, even if worse things happened to him, everyone loves him, but not his friends, there is probably Dumbledore bashing in way, he befriends Severus in few minutes while he couldn't do it in holy shit many years. We can't also forget that Severus had Occlumency lessons with Harry (because, if I remember correctly, you haven't changed anything until marriage contract except Sirius living) and he for sure had to see some of his past and there is highly probability that he could also see 'those' memories. When I said you haven't changed anything, I mean anything except for what I said and character personalities. Because they are really OOC and in this case, shitty. You lack in creativity and in writing skills. I'm probably losing some of my brain functioning reading it. I don't even want to advice you what to fix, because my head hurts, because of it. I'm so done with this fanfiction. I probably will need to exorcise my library not so soon after I delete it from there.
Devidakk chapter 8 . 8/13
Somehow this fanfiction managed to get on my nerves. In negative sense. Beginning wasn't bad, but next chapters, however, are worse. You don't have the ability to properly write Voldemort for one, your Lucius is really out of character, the same with Narcissa and Draco, and your dialogues, in lack of better word, suck. You think that Severus after finding out would be oh-so-nice immediately? You need to think about how he thought about Harry until now, you need to think about how he was acting in canon and you need to stop make him act so nice and wrong. You took someone bitter with sharp wit and hate for everything that has something to do with James Potter (except for Lily) and changed him into something that has almost no character. He acts like half of his past doesn't exist, you've done the same thing with Sirius. After what Sirius and James done (risking Severus to be bitten by Remus) normal "Sorry" is not enough. Severus very well could be dead, no matter how much hurts me to say it, because of Remus. And Remus should also be apologised to by James and Sirius, because he could, very well, be expelled or beheaded if someone really wanted that. And I don't doubt that Lucius would take the opportunity to do so. Sirius would probably, too, take worse consequences. If Severus then died, I also doubt that Lily would marry James. So yeah, they could very well mess up all universe in few moments, and I don't think 'sorry' is enough. And you make it look like it is enough. So yeah, I will try to survive reading it for few more chapters and see if it's even worth reading. And I need to correct my previous comment: In every fanfiction I ever read on this website and in English. Because it hit me that I've read that one good fanfiction in my native language (polish) that was about reincarnation, marriage contract and Tomarry, very well written and all and had no rape. Even though some characters suggested it.
Devidakk chapter 3 . 8/13
In every Tomarry story with marriage contracts I've ever read, there's rape...
Devidakk chapter 1 . 8/12
Idea's not bad, but... well, first chapter and I can tell that master of writing contacts you are not. I'm still finding more loopholes in there than can count. My main problems with it, however, are that it is really one-sided, I mean... It states that Tom Marvolo Riddle also known as Lord Voldemort cannot 'hurt' Harry James Potter (it doesn't state form, so he can say physically. Also, you should turn your attention in the place where it only says 'Tom Marvolo Riddle' and it doesn't count Death Eaters, so Tom can order one of his followers to do something to Harry, while he won't even move a finger), while it also doesn't say that Voldemort cannot humiliate Harry or kill him on the spot. Then contract would be nullified, because Harry wouldn't sleep with Voldemort in the time he demanded. It would be great victory, because they would give Harry on silver platter and they couldn't really do anything. Also, there's case of statement 'Mr. Potter [...] to refrain from any sexual intercourse with other persons' so it means, that while Harry cannot cheat on Tom, Tom can do it. And those are one of the most obvious ones...
Osama chapter 17 . 8/7
Damn, I was looking forward to the smut...
Alexo chapter 1 . 7/26
Aghghagahagahahtahahahahahag love it.
Gurgaraneth chapter 1 . 7/25
Anazin loved the story
Lyla Young chapter 15 . 7/16
Hello my name is Lyla Young, and I just had to tell you how much I love this story with, where it's going, and my hopes for it's continuation. It is such a refreshing point of view and it comes together beautifully. This is the first message I've sent to a writer even though I've been reading from this website for 2 years now but you wrote a great story here and I am eagerly awaiting more.
Harley S. Quinn chapter 1 . 6/19
Great beginning!
Roz chapter 17 . 6/16
Thank you for writing your story ! I hope that you continue writing stories !
Can you please write a story on Severus and Rudolphus and Sunny and Rabastan's relationship? Thanks!
Moriarty.Sherlock chapter 26 . 5/30
I love tgat fairytail!
Guest chapter 4 . 5/20
I really like this story, and the plot - at least so far - is super interesting. However, I couldn't help but notice that your piece doesn't seem to be betaed. If you're ok with it, I wanted to offer my services and edit it for you. I think that if you got it edited it would be even better than it already is. If you take me up on my offer, just email me at , ok?
LittleMeowMoo chapter 3 . 4/17
Lucius Malfoy owning a limo?! Each to their own I guess, but it's rather weird that you would have him using muggle transport whilst he is so big on blood purity and hating of all things muggle.

The concept of your story is intriguing, but it is not written as well as it could have been. The grammatical errors make it difficult and less enjoyanle to read.
Guest chapter 61 . 4/15
I found the missing scenes in adultfanfiction.
Guest chapter 61 . 4/15
Great story just amazing. For any one who is checking the reviews before reading the whole story. I can tell honestly its worth it.
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