|Reviews for True Evil|
| the sister of the anime bros chapter 2 . 11/26/2011
I...Rose R. Red (-fake name) have officially laughed so hard from your stories...that I have a physical therapy appointment for breaking my jaw. I shall keep watching out for your stories and put them on my alerts/favorites...and now a word from my imaginary sponser: HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH! XD
| kyubinaruto-phoenixjohn chapter 11 . 4/28/2008
great story it would be great if you put the mamodos in biju biju fruit
| avatar2468 chapter 1 . 11/5/2006
| CAPTAIN PLANET chapter 11 . 10/30/2006
that chapter is cute as your smile and funny as our shows...CAPTAIN PLANET!
| Hikari Ino chapter 10 . 10/26/2006
| Hikari Ino chapter 9 . 10/24/2006
| ConanKid chapter 6 . 10/18/2006
Finally the story is getting good. Keep it up
| ConanKid chapter 4 . 10/6/2006
Okay looks like I'll be the first to comment, so be happy.
There are 2 problems in the story that threw me off especially in this chapter.
1. Why do you use Luffy's dubbed attacks? I mean you kept the name Zoro instead of Zolo, but you use Gum Gum Rocket instead of
Gomu Gomu no Rocket.
2 Have you ever heard of spell check? I mean come on, you writing is fine but consatnt mistakes like mispelle words and grammar errors real put me off. Ok in one part of Ch 4 you write
“Do you think can escape?” asked Kaya
you probaly meant
“Do you think *we* can escape?” asked Kaya, also you wrote
“You wouldn’t think of capturing now would you…” she said in a too cute way.
you know and I know that it should be
“You wouldn’t think of capturing *me* now would you…” she said in a too cute way.
So what Iam trying to say is just to improve your grammar, not just this story, but your others as well.
In the end your story is coming up nice, so keep up the good work. _