|Reviews for A Broken Soul|
| Waywardneko chapter 1 . 12/20/2013
...This was good.
| FlyerCat chapter 1 . 10/2/2013
I think this is one of my favorite HP/HDM crossovers here. It's really brilliant, how you tied in Pullman's idea of everyone having daemons in our world, just not seeing it. And how Voldemort tore his daemon apart by creating Horecruxes.
My favorite concept was his relationship with Nagini. I think it was the most touching part-how he kept her close, almost seemed to pretend she was the soul he had, for the most part, lost. It was also very well done-although I really wished we saw Voldemort's reaction to Nagini's death.
My favorite part was the very end: "He saw, with perfect clarity, the she-wolf standing next to Potter, her hackles raised, her lips curled back in a snarl. She gave him strength, a strength that he lacked, and she dazzled with the purity of Potter's heart. The fragment of soul left inside him trembled.
And Lord Voldemort was afraid." Not only is this chilling, but it's also interesting and a perfect end.
Also, I love Harry's daemon as a she-wolf. I thought about HP daemon forms, and I decided Harry's would be an Arabian Wolf (small and scruffy, to match his humble side, but a wolf all the same!) so I was very happy with your choice. A lot of people think patronuses would match daemons, but, I think patronuses reflects an animal you find protective. That's why Harry's would be a stag.
Alright, I'm done rambling. This was a great read, thank you for publishing this!
| Burnt Parchment chapter 1 . 9/28/2013
Wow this was amazing. You're a very talented writer.
| Featherfur chapter 1 . 5/28/2013
I loved this story maybe u should do a series of one shots over how everyone interacts with their daemon I think that would be cool as well
| toolazytologin chapter 1 . 5/26/2012
that was really good!
the reason for keeping nagini around was plausible
the way you wrote voldemprt was realistic
| mainstreet52 chapter 1 . 4/4/2012
Well-written, and a fascinating concept to match the execution. I approve. :)
| captainbanana chapter 1 . 3/31/2012
This was fantastic. I love the cross over of the two fandoms, and especially the use of Nagini as his idea of a replacement soul.
Very nicely done, I felt the pace was just right, you skipped the in between bits but without it feeling rushed
| DarkSideOfTheMoon chapter 1 . 3/29/2012
| PanBelacqua chapter 1 . 3/26/2012
It was positively brilliant, the way you structured this story. The pacing was perfect, the ending was one that left the reader warm and glowing, in an oddly courageous way. Your word use was supple and fresh. All in all, a very good story.
| Vaughn Tyler chapter 1 . 2/25/2012
| kimmikiwi chapter 1 . 1/23/2012
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| AKAAkira chapter 1 . 11/3/2011
This is an interesting concept, but I don'r feel that you did much more than show the readers the mouths of the potentially deep caves. Soul dæmons, okay, Horcruxes splits the dæmons, got it, but what would the existence of each part be like? To what extent would the incompleted soul be considered an existence? Would it still yearn to reconnect to the form it once was? How is this act detrimental to the split parts, or possibly the environment around them? These are some questions you really could have gone into, but didn't.
The Nagini thing was a pretty solid link though, nice job thinking that up.
Two more things: that Russian guy seems a little stale as a character. I thought he was subdued way too easily. I think you could've put in a little more trouble.
And, wow, I thought *I* spammed line breaks. I thought some sections here really didn't need them. The last section is an example where I would, but the part detailing his exploits, we know you're skimming over the timeline, I don't think a line break was needed for every expedition.
Generally a nice fic, though. Great writing style.
| obsidian flight chapter 1 . 10/31/2011
Just going to stop by and say that this was *amazing*. The process of loosing his soul, how Nagini became a poor substitute to it, and the face off with Harry at the end (which, while brief, fit the pace of the story).
| Lexyann chapter 1 . 5/8/2011
Wow ! Incredible ! Awesome!
Really enjoyed my reading. And of course, what else than a snake as a Daemon for Voldemort...? :)
Good job! :)
| Daniella Violet Moon chapter 1 . 4/16/2011
Oh my codfish. This is awesome to infinity! Voldy's so evil and yet somehow that makes him more interesting to read. Love the use of the snake-daemon as his but, while it fits him, Harry's daemon just seems random. But Lyra had a pine marten, so who cares. Beautiful, evil, sad, and well writen. Not to mention well ended. "And Lord Voldemort was afraid." A cliffhanger that somehow isn't.