|Reviews for Daddy in a Day|
| Guest chapter 1 . 10/19
oh no dont let something bad happen
| Guest chapter 1 . 9/5
| Mady chapter 1 . 7/27
lol cute story two thumbs up
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/21
| Dracos forever chapter 1 . 5/17
Awwwwwwwww soooooooo sweetttttttt!
| CJ chapter 1 . 5/17
All the magical kids seem to get married soon after they leave Hogwarts.
| Sage chapter 1 . 4/28
Really good you should add more to it
| Guest chapter 1 . 4/14
LOVED IT SOOOOOOOOOOO MUCH, please write a sequel
| FireStorm chapter 1 . 1/19
That was AWESOME
| ella lee chapter 1 . 11/29/2014
you should make another chapter
| Potter rulz chapter 1 . 11/20/2014
Hermiones parents are Jerry and Mary Granger.
| articcat621 chapter 1 . 11/11/2014
Sweet story. Loved that it all worked out.
| Skyselisse chapter 1 . 11/11/2014
Hm... Where to start; this is a bit complicated...
The story is there, yes. But not really in the sense of description: The characters really ONLY talk with one another. There are merely four or five lines that truly describe what the characters are feeling. Like, when Draco appears and finds Hermione having these contractions, he doesn't seem to be shocked whatsoever. He's all like: "Oh, okay!" and simply says he understands. – Of course this is a good thing, but… What man in the world wouldn't be shocked to suddenly see a woman giving birth to a child and being told that the child is theirs? – And what about Hermione's reaction? "I'm sorry, what is going to happen now?" – No description on the way she says it? Not really saying if she's anguished, or relieved, or sad, or happy? To me, that sounded completely neutral, just as if she had been a robot. – Sorry, but these two reactions were WAY too unrealistic.
Another thing that annoys me (sorry, I'm trying to be gentle, but this REALLY annoys me) is this:
"…" he said,
"…" she replied,
"…" they asked,
Know what I mean? The commas. Try to end a sentence with a period instead. It's the correct way to write, a part from being WAY more elegant. – Just a piece of advice ;)
Look, what I'm trying to say is, you still have to practice a lot. – That's why you should keep writing and being creative, that's the beauty of it: The more you write, the better you become. :)
| 21peach chapter 1 . 11/8/2014
Can you pls make it inro a chapter? I am dying to read more.
| zaphyro azul chapter 1 . 9/23/2014
So beautifull, so tender, I almost cry, a very simple one shot but full of wonderfull love, congratulations!