Naruto literally told you needs momey and you fine him?(critiqe of the hokage)(your writing is great im just mad at him)

god damn this is an og, is a fairly good one tho.

Well...the Kiri-nins definitely didn't do themselves any favors by making Naruto angry.
. . . Why do I get the feeling that when Naruto finds Sasuke and Sakura while the Oto-Nins are attacking, he punches one of them and then pretty pissed off he says something like, "I had a REALLY shitty night. You either get lost or you can serve as practice dummies, where I can vent my frustration. I'll give you 3 seconds to decide."

I see that Kota is still there and is talking to Naruto during his training: *Starts running around the room in a panic*

Okay...if Sakura quits being the shinobi, Naruto and Sasuke can't take part in the exams...UNLESS someone else is quickly found who can step in *squints at Haku* But then again, Haku is not a Konoha kunoichi

Me when Kota asks about Naruto: /de/view/beast-tamer-kanade-cat-girl-anime-cat-girl-the-beast-tamer-who-was-exiled-from-his-party-meets-a-cat-girl-from-the-strongest-race-gif-26937908

Oh wow, Sakura found out that guns kill. No shit Sherlock.

Okay, when Sasuke starts to worry, we know it's serious.

but whatever it was made Haku decide to follow Naruto like a lost puppy - Excuse you? You and the other girls (except Hinata) acted the same way when it came to Sasuke!
Are you just angry because your own behavior is finally being pointed out to you?

this is bullshit civilian can bully ninja but ninja can't?

wow one of the best fanfiction I have ever read. I loved how you kept the characters personalities canon wise and then slowly changed them. Def adding this to my Favs

I have an Idea how chapter 10's plot is summarized.

Naruto and team 7 pass the forest of death stage (As they did in the series) meanwhile, Kouta meets up with mai who was traumatized and reports to kouta what happened to makoto and shinji she also tells him about naruto's power believing it to be an evil bloodline curse. Kouta becomes intrigued by mai's report and becomes interested in naruto as well but, decided it's best to travel to kiri first and to have haku's blood tested and to formulate a plan on how he will exact his revenge. He then leaves and mai and orders her to try and gather as much info as she can of naruto and immediately report whatever she can find out about him. As preparation for the next stage of the chuunin exams, all passers were allowed to get a day to rest. Haku meets naruto and was horrified of the state naruto was in after being tortured by the kiri nin.. he explained what happened and begins asking haku who she really was. he also apologizes for never even asking her about herself and that he was no better than zabuza was.

Well I'm not a writer but I do have some ideas for those who would want to continue this. In the chuunin exam we can just summarize the fights after the forest of death then we move on to the finals, this time haku will find out that she can watch the fights as a spectator, ayame and teuchi allows her to do so, she then watches the fights and was very happy and very proud to watch naruto win against neji. then they meet up haku congratulates him and he thanks her for the training. then she assist naruto in the fight against gaara, she goes with him with master jiraiya for the tsunade search, she tries to fend off kisame and itachi until jiraiya arrived. she also asks jiraiya to train her so she can get stronger to protect naruto from the akatsuki. She fights with naruto against kabuto. When they arrive back to the leaf and tsunade becomes hokage she makes her a full fledged citizen of konoha and a ninja that allows her to go with naruto in his missions, acknowledging the fact that naruto is targeted by the akatsuki and that she has proved that she would do everything for her naruto-sama. In the sasuke search arc she fights kimimaro with gaara and the story goes on and as it does her feelings for naruto-sama deepens zabuza trained her to not have feelings so she does not know she is falling inlove with her naruto-sama. while naruto on the other hand, is trying his best to reciprocates everything that she's given him offcourse still being oblivious but time does come when she confesses to naruto and naruto also discovered he loves her too. well you guys with actual talent in writing and who believes haku deserves better can just fill in on to make this into a story.

The way you make Naruto grow then suddenly regress his growth is really impressive. what happened to guy with the good chakra control in the early chapters and a more matured attitude?

pretty epic story honestly love the depth of it. best of luck,

naruto is not pathetic. the village rhat abused him is pathetic. the homage who failed to properly protect him is pathetic. the academy that sabotaged their villages jinchuriki is pathetic. having an Anbu Captain as a jonin left to train you and didn't is pathetic. NOT NARUTO

Any ine who writes harems,incest or pedo shit is automatically trash

Naruto's canon personality really pisses me off, his hypocrisy his grandpa hokage is a baby killer and I don't see him complaining about it