Reviews for Tower of Salvation
Incoherent Elegy chapter 1 . 7/4/2008
Heh heh. I'm reading your fanfiction as promised. XD

I actually remember reading this a long time ago...and not knowing it was you who wrote it. D: *slaps self*

Fanfiction where Zelos dies always makes me so sad. I can barely stand reading them because I love him so much. DX
CaptainKa chapter 1 . 6/25/2008
I LOVED IT! So cute. And so sad! It made me cry. I still am crying.
The Scarlet Sky chapter 1 . 3/25/2007
Yes! I got this as my first ending, and it was so saddening when Zelos... Gagh! Why did it have to happen? T.T Very well-written, you could have beefed up the fighting scene some, but fight scenes are hard to write, aren't they? N, anyway, good work.
BleedingTulips chapter 1 . 10/20/2006
Whoa, that's deep. I really got depressed when Zelos died. He's, like, my favorite character. It was good, I like the angst...:3
Scattle chapter 1 . 10/11/2006
Hiya, Scaff!

I was just reading through the reviews and the one review was critisizing everything Oh well.

I liked it, I have to agree with the fighting scene bit though, one-shot or not.


Oh least I still have my Kratos!

Kratos: Why aren't you mourning for he loss of your friend?


Kratos: ...You're right...I'm sorry...(goes off and sulks about anna for a while)

OKAY, I'm done being stupid.

Overall, I'd give it an 8/10. Great job.
bright snow chapter 1 . 10/10/2006
Okay! First of all...

I liked how you had everything set up. It was great how you kept switching from Zelos's view to Sheena's, though in most of Sheena's sections you had a lot of short, choppy little sentences. If you combined some of them it'd make the whole thing flow a little better.

Second of all...

I'm glad you didn't go through and copy the entire script. Unless you did and I just can't remember, ha ha...

Third of all...

I liked how you had Zelos thinking about every little comment in the last few parts. It makes him sound more real and exposes just what kind of coward he really is. :3 -Hugs Zelos plushie-

Fourth of all...

In the third section, you spelled the word 'angrily' wrong. Just a note if you ever feel like updating this story.

Fifth of all...

The fight scene was pretty pathetic in my book. I mean, just one short paragraph? And then only about five attacks in total- I mean, that's really not a fight scene...and then you didn't mention anything about the rest of the party. I know in the game you only fight with four people max, but it just makes more sense to use everybody. And then you could have said how Sheena was waiting for Zelos to back her up for some attack but forgot that he was the one she was fighting...

Sixth of all...

At the end, you could have had some pretty fierce irony with some bright sun shining through or something to top the whole thing off. And the fact that this is in a religous place as well.

All in all!

I liked the plot; however, the actual building of it could be improved.

Nice job!
Jubejube chapter 1 . 10/9/2006
Aw...that's so sad. I think the story is amazing. The only problem is the narraration. I don't know how you would do it, but I think you need to indicate whose point of view it is, just for the first part.