OOOOH! I really loved this. I never liked Stockwell, ( my friend and I have a tradition of booing him whenever he comes onscreen) and I can totally see him saying wicked things to Murdock when the others aren't around. Murdock's revelations about the death camp at the beginning were heartbreaking, but I loved to see them because I am always curious what our boys went through out there. It seems like a pretty big thing they had to survive, and knowing how brave they were and how they got over it enough to move on just makes me more in love with them. General Chao and Stockwell being similar...now that's a really scary thought. Especially since he's gonna try to get revenge. I think I wouldn't mind for him to get some revenge (angst and hurt/comfort are my weakness) but it would be a no-brainer that the team would kick his tail at the end. They have to, for all to be right with the world, right? Anyway, good work! Looking forward to more.

Wonderfully written, loved it :D

Thank you very much for this story! I have always really, really disliked Stockwell and thought that the A-Team should ditch him. You have made my dreams a reality! And I would love it if you would write a sequel, several sequels in fact! Decker was may favorite chaser of the A-Team, but I think you could pull off an equally good one. (In fact, I think it would be more realistic for a new one to start chasing them now). You write 'em, I'll read and review 'em! As far as Stockwell fussing over them I think that he should try for one story and then realize that it isn't gonna work, in that story (whenever you write it) Frankie should consider joining them or come up with something better to do that work for Stockwell. Again, thanks a million! :)

go to admit its an awesome genre and i think it deserves more stories along this vein

i say grab some friends and run with the jazz as long and as far as you can..ill catch up soon

:P

i love the fact that they escaped! too bad you could deal with stockwell in a more final way. not really kill him but more like they found something to blackmail him with, so he would leave them alone

i love the murdock thing!

I loved it. i never did like or trust Stockwell or even like Frankie that much.

I would of loved for them to of left Stockwells on the show.

oh please...give decker a chance...or better put de4cker and lynch in one team..they'll kill themselves...put please write more..perhapsa you already did..I'm gonna chevk on that...

10/10...

I like the plot. Murdock would be able to snap them from the malaise that Stockwell had them in. Never was a big Frankie fan-ick!

You need to have a beta check for grammatical and spelling errors. There and their, your and you're...little stuff like that makes a big difference. Also, you used survives instead of services. Comma useage would be nice, so as to prevent run-on sentences. This seems nitpicky, but it is meant in the best way.

Overall, the plot wins, in that it kept me interested enough to gloss over the errors.

Hm. Promising. Promising. Sequel, please.

I vote for bringing back Decker. :) He had class.

The basic concept of the story is good. A-Team fanfic is in desperate need of some good classic stories! Enough with relationship stories (and, God help us all, bad slash), enough with "X years in the future" stories, enough with angst; I wanna see some good old-school butt-kicking. I'm looking forward to you supplying plenty of that.

I'm a little unsure of your comparison of Stockwell with Chao, but then again this is all from Murdock's POV, so it doesn't necessarily have to make my kind of sense. (and I hated the Stockwell episodes anyway, so I'm no judge of accuracy there) Except for BA, the other team members seem kind of interchangeable. I think you need to emphasize their distinct personalities a bit more. Here's an exercise to try: write a sequence of dialog with no names, then give it to someone and ask them who the speakers are. (No cheating by mentioning things like flying that would pin it to one character!) It's good practice in capturing the distinctive tone of each character.

Now for the bad news: You desperately need a beta reader, or at least someone with a basic grasp of written English who can proofread your work. At times it can't be read, it has to be decoded. You mix past and present tense, sometimes in the same sentence. You replace words with other words that sound similar but mean something entirely different. Your punctuation is not only wrong but not even consistantly wrong. You seem to think that an apostrophe means "Here comes an S!" You write longer run-on sentences than I do, and that's just plain scary.

You have a good start to a good story here. I'm looking forward to where you're going with this. The problem is that the errors in tense, spelling, capitalization, word usage, and so on make it nearly unreadable. Fix those problems and you've got a good story in the making.

ROTFLMAFO! I love it! I can just see the steam coming out of Stockwell's ears and the wide 'on the Jazz' grin on Hannibal's face! It got pretty intense there for a moment when Murdock was lecturing the rest of the team, that was a well thought out piece. Br...just the way he described it gives me shivers, because you're right, for a pilot to lose his/her hands is for them to lose all hope. Again well done. The plot is solid and so is the thinking behind it. The only thing wrong is a few spelling and grammer errors. Nice. I think you should do a sequel with someone new chaseing the team, Hannibal would love it! (Pictures the 'on the Jazz' grin) Till next time. Pyro

lol, very good. It does seem strange to me that the A-Team would agree to join Stockwell.

Thanks for posting,

Sparky