|Reviews for Somewhere I belong|
| Kittencat3 chapter 5 . 3/13/2014
Ugh. And since when does Spike go riding motorcycles IN THE DAYTIME?
Chapter went way downhill; just as well this was never finished.
| Kittencat3 chapter 3 . 3/13/2014
Mm, decent writing, but the characterizations need some work. There is no universe short of tearing Joss' characters apart and starting from scratch where Xander doesn't hate Spike with a hot, heavy hate: grudging tolerance is the best it ever gets. Faith loving Buffy and thinking of her as family? No way: there are times she respects Buffy, there are times she *likes* Buffy, but Faith's pretty four-square about the fact that the only good guy in the whole Buffyverse she'd go to the wall for is Angel.
| lizzywithfire chapter 5 . 12/25/2008
but you haven't updated in almost three years, which makes me a non happy chappy..
But that was really good.. PLEASE UDPATE
| AriellaRose chapter 5 . 3/26/2007
oh baby jesus! this story is wonderful! just fucking wonderful, hope there's more soon, you kick ass!
| zeo knight chapter 5 . 2/8/2007
this is cool not just causea buffy
| spikes-storm chapter 5 . 11/29/2006
Love it so much. Cant wait to read what happens next.
| King Henry the V chapter 5 . 11/28/2006
A story with a brighter place for characters that certainly deserve more happiness in their lives. It is a nice premise that reads at a decent pace. The great flaw of this story is not in the plot, but the writing style (though CH. 5 is better than the others).
The problem is this:
In a paragraph with dialogue, only the speaker's actions should be described. Describing the actions of another character in the same paragraph makes it easy to confuse who is speaking. Also, if there are more than, say, 3-5 consecutive paragraphs with only dialogue and no description, then it also becomes pretty easy to confuse who is speaking. "He said/She said" can be useful, though describing the tone of voice or mannerisms (e.g. "she could imagine so-and-so pacing across the room") better draws in the reader.
The existing descriptions, for example in Ch. 5's Rory/Lorelai phone conversation, are clunky at best. Eliminating semi-colons through changes in sentence structure might be helpful (semi-colons are rarely used, and they are very conspicuous). The reader might make more sense of Lorelai's babbling with the addition of double-hyphens and/or paragraph breaks.
| Silent Me chapter 5 . 11/23/2006
| enchantedlight chapter 5 . 11/23/2006
great chapter! update soon!
| Allen Pitt chapter 5 . 11/23/2006
You got the Lorelei/Rory dialog down pat, that's not easy. And they're dead right about the Saw movies. if you're going to do it, do it yourself, poser!... Even angelus would do it himself, though he might take a week or two 2 work up to it... Having her visit would be fun...
Next up: Have Harmony visit. Imagine her chattering away with Lorelei/Rory... Or for that matter, Cordelia showing up (can't imagine why, but go with it)... she & Lorelei could bond over shoe shopping. Maybe the Chase's & the Gilmore's go way back or something. I could easily see Angel sending someone to check up on Dawn.
Wow, a whole day and nobody killed or maimed. What is wrong with that crazy town?...
* I think my ISP is filtering the messages, haven't gotten any for a week now. Sigh.
| Allen Pitt chapter 4 . 11/17/2006
Next: Richard & Emily turn out to be retired Watchers ... Next: Spike meets Kirk. The alderman sees Spike's motorcycle and calls a town meeting...
| Silent Me chapter 4 . 11/17/2006
I love the story!
| enchantedlight chapter 4 . 11/16/2006
great chapter! update soon!
| FooBarBaz chapter 3 . 11/14/2006
These first three chapters are a great start. I hope that you can keep it up for the rest of the story.
| June22 chapter 3 . 11/13/2006
I guess I repeat myself but... great! The characterizations of everyone just fits. I'm really curious of what will happen...
Please update soon!