|Reviews for Sly Cooper: The Beast Awakens|
| MoonHowler557 chapter 2 . 4/13/2010
EVIL BENTLEY! He killed the wolfie : (
| MoonHowler557 chapter 1 . 4/13/2010
Me like story. Me love Wolfies.
| Evil Riggs chapter 1 . 7/16/2007
Oh dear, look at the time!
| Kaiser Scott chapter 1 . 10/27/2006
Sweet God, kid. What the fuck is wrong with you?
| SirPointsOutTheObvious-A-Lot chapter 1 . 10/20/2006
I hate to point out the obvious, but there was absolutely NO gore in this chapter at all; none, not even the tiniest drop of blood was shed. You even said it yourself, "Sly looked at his arm and suprisingly it was not bleeding." See? Not bleeding means there wasn't any blood, erego, no gore.
Also, your writing is riddled with spelling mistakes and grammar errors. About half of your sentences have the first word capitalized, the other half do not. Don't forget that names (such as Sly, Bentley, or Murray) need to be capitalized at all times.
Furthermore you portray the characters behaving in ways that they never would. Now, I know that the actual Sly Cooper games had no swears, because including any vulgarities would have bumped the game's ESRB rating up a point or two, but Sly would not swear at his friends.
One last thing, please don't include the registered trademark sign, as it messes with the overall effect a normal paragraph of text has on a reader.
Positives: More description than some Sly Cooper stories
Negatives: Poor spelling, poor grammar, poor characterization, relatively short, and uninteresting
Bottom Line: Better luck next time