|Reviews for Collapse|
| katydid13 chapter 3 . 10/22/2006
| LizzieH1313 chapter 3 . 10/22/2006
Hm, everything may have happened a bit fast, but somehow I like it. Keep going!
| jillsbkansas chapter 3 . 10/22/2006
great. cant wait for more
| Bahamut.girl chapter 3 . 10/22/2006
I loved this chapter. I liked the drastic turn of events. Write more.
| Call Me Sarah chapter 3 . 10/22/2006
I LOVE LOvE LOVE every bit of it!
| necira-skies chapter 3 . 10/22/2006
come out from behind the chair (and please start on the next chapter). I thought that you did a good job with this chapter-and don't worry too much about the story going somewhere you didn't expect it too-they can do that sometimes.
| nickysbabygirl chapter 3 . 10/22/2006
OMG why would you have doubts about posting that? It was AWESOME! I really enjoyed it. You must update soon. Great job!
| melxs chapter 3 . 10/22/2006
the chapter was great, absolutley loved it
| Chione of the Nile chapter 3 . 10/22/2006
That wasn't the end was it? Cause I need more.
| lccb chapter 2 . 10/22/2006
I like what you've written so far - looking forward to seeing where this is headed.
| jdcocoagirl chapter 2 . 10/22/2006
so cute and great story line. update soon.
| anon chapter 2 . 10/22/2006
Not bad, although I think you are talking about a dock, peir, or warf breaking and not a jetty. Jettys usually do not have any boards that could break. A dock can possibly be connected to a jetty and that could be what broke. I am sorry about this, the writing was good but I was having a hard time reading it because I kept thinking about that term. Other than that keep up the writing. The more you write, the better you will get, and the better your stories will be.
| necira-skies chapter 2 . 10/21/2006
Your first two chapters are a good start to a story. I hope that you'll update again soon.
| Bahamut.girl chapter 2 . 10/21/2006
Cute...really cute. And progressing nicely. I cant wait for the christmas party :)
| nickysbabygirl chapter 2 . 10/21/2006
OMG that was great. Hmm I wonder what will happen next. Please update as soon as possible. I really love it.