Reviews for Ocean Blue and Sapphire
Guest chapter 10 . 6/24
Pretty good chapter. I hope you don't mind critique.
The lemon was a fairly decent one, but was a very basic and amateur lemon.
Your overuse of exclamation points and capitol letters kinda throws it off, and the lack of build up doesn't help very much either.
Instead of "AHH! SORA!"
It would be more of a turn on to change that to: "Ah...! Sora...!" And add slanted words where you feel more emphasis is.
Also, another thing bugging me is your author's notes. It feels as if you're making another story with them, when your story should be solely about your story, and your author's notes shouldn't be but a sentence or two long. In professional writing, you wouldn't have an author's note with its own story enclosed, nor would it be nearly as long as the chapter itself.

All in all, very interesting story plot, but could've executed better.

Keep writing!
molly clay lovad chapter 10 . 9/13/2013
i dont like it if its riku i like it if its roxas and sora not all three
Kay chapter 21 . 1/27/2013
iiTeddyBear chapter 21 . 12/12/2012
but but but wheres 22?! but i must say theses are so cute!
MidnightxMusic chapter 21 . 9/26/2012

Much happier than the last one. That just made me cry buckets. ;_;

I hope this isn't discontinued or anything. D':
Rawriminsane chapter 10 . 2/29/2012
I found the doushinji!
Rawriminsane chapter 10 . 2/29/2012
I found the doushinji!
No Pein No Game chapter 21 . 1/29/2012
I love these drables! Roxas and Sora are so cute!
Takara yume chapter 3 . 1/20/2012
amg! this was genius! XDD
Takara yume chapter 2 . 1/20/2012
lol how adorable~! XDD
Skylar Light chapter 21 . 10/2/2011
I hate Riku/Roxas too! Worst pairing ever in my opinion. Sora/Axel are okay for me though which is weird. If Riku and Roxas don't have any contact in the RikuxSoraxRoxas thing then I'm all for it xD This story is so cute! I love how Roxas just jumps to conclusions and when Sora kissed him, I just squealed.
Guest chapter 21 . 5/20/2011
Lolette Leonhart chapter 11 . 12/8/2010
Ah, ya gotta love white day! This was adorable & sweet... Litterally! I now have a strong desire for a Hershy's Chocalate Bar...*DROOLS*
Lolette Leonhart chapter 10 . 12/8/2010
OMG! I totally know which SasuNaru Doujinshi you're talking about! I LOVE that one. The ending is soooooo funny! Awesome job on this! Now, if you'll excuse me... I have to clean the blood off my keyboard that was left behind from my nose bleed. Now I know how Ku-chan feels...
Lolette Leonhart chapter 2 . 12/8/2010
"You do realize, we forgot our shit?" LMAO! I have NO IDEA as to why this line made me die laughing! But it did... Aaaahhhh, sssssooooo FUNNY! XDD!
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