|Reviews for Grey Maiden IV: Darkness Rising|
| Noble Korhedron chapter 21 . 7/15/2013
Hmm, very interesting Ch. :-)
| Noble Korhedron chapter 18 . 7/14/2013
TAKE. THAT. MALFOY! *evil grin*
| Noble Korhedron chapter 25 . 6/10/2012
MORE! FINISH BK. V FOR GOD'S SAKE! You CANNOT expect to leave us all hanging on a cliffy - you, devious SLYTHERIN you!
| Noble Korhedron chapter 15 . 6/10/2012
OI? What's this? Peregrines only in N. America? Permit me to call "BULLSHIT" on that one! Now that they are protected, they'll even nest in cities in Western Europe, if left undisturbed while laying and raising their young!
Oh, and keep it up. I'm still enjoying this! :-)
| Noble Korhedron chapter 13 . 6/9/2012
WOWZERS! WHAT. A. BATTLE! Hope you ain't got 'im in trouble?
| Noble Korhedron chapter 12 . 6/9/2012
Good work - you're still keeping me interested, which is always a good thing. I'm looking forward to the firs task.
| Noble Korhedron chapter 2 . 6/9/2012
OI YOU - continuity error! You say none of the English kings were wizards, but in the last story, you said one of the Henry's was - I think it was Henry IV?
Oh, and good chapter.
| christian bale chapter 3 . 8/15/2011
the veela allure is a mental and magical gift that unless you have an ordered mind,are in LOVE,or an occulemens then sticking your fingers in your ear is not going to SAVE you from it,the only reason that harry in the books could fight it off is because he was in love with hermonie,if you paid close attention to the book you'd know he was under the veela thrall untill hermonie touched his shoulder in the book and also in the movie as well.
| corrwin chapter 25 . 8/7/2011
Ok, here I am, after a fascinating journey through the first 4 books and it makes me wanna try to recapitulate how I feel about this fanfic so far. And I must say it's definitely one of the best I've read. Well written and addictive.
I don't usually like OC, but Daphne is a well-developed, intriguing character that really adds to the story. I love politics, and Grey Maiden series has this... I don't know, call it "Game of Thrones" feel, to compare with the best :) I'm really curious to see what goblins will do, how the war will be played... the interactions between Harry, his allies and Ministry during late Fudge administration and how different your Scrimageur will be (as you promessed in one of the A/N). Story really feels epic, multi-stage preparations to (I hope and believe) even more epic war.
And it's going to get harder to write, I think, because you're going deeper and deeper into AU, and to follow all the subplots, give proper space to all the characters... I do look forward to seeing how you deal with that.
You managed to point out the mistakes and faults of characters like Dumbledore or Ron without making them evil, and made the Dark wizards (those not supporting Voldemort) interesting and multi-dimensional. Not only certain maiden, but entire universe is rather grey than black/white - and that's great.
If it was to be published, story could probably use some more editing - damn it, in the times of Cervantes fanfiction was widely published and nobody (exluding cash-deprived authors ;) complained... I'd by hardcover edition of slightly polished GM gladly :]
Sometimes I get the feeling you forget about some characters for half a book, but it only means that each book should be at least twice as long, to develop all the subplots to their full potential :) We really have some nice events and characters that just don't have enough spotlight after being introduced to the story.
From time to time I get the feeling that Harry's relations with the Gryffindors are a little too strained, and hadn't Ron had enough time for some growing up? I'm looking forward to see how Harry will go about gathering support from the Light side, I understand that it was not so easy so far. Will Dumbledore ever understand and appreciate his efforts to widen the anti-Voldemort Alliance?
Oh, and I really appreciate the dialogue with your readers by extensive A/N, helps to understand the story and the characters better.
All in all, a very enjoyable, very mature and cleverly devised AU, I hope you will manage to finish it (and ASAP ;) I usually try not to begin incomplete stories, but I will proceed to start reeding Sacrifice immidiately...
Thanks for a great read!
| megapointe7 chapter 25 . 7/19/2011
All I have to say is 'Wow'. This has to be, by far, the best and my favorite HP fanfic that I have read. As soon as I finished reading this, I just ind of sat there, stunned. A never expected a story of that quality from something as simple as fanfiction. The progression of the characters as well as the plot was developed throughout each year smoothly. Everything about it just drew me into the tale and I loved it. I have yet to read the fifth story, but I have no doubt that I will love it as well. I can't wait to see what you do with the last two years. There is no doubt in my mind that they will be as good as, if not better than the previous ones. Good job.
| mfmxxx chapter 24 . 5/12/2011
Daphne saying that Harry couldn't understand what it was like for her to loose Edmund, but it will probably be like that for him when he does finally lose her...
Ginny being in Slytherin but telling him to always stop his power plays... it's a little annoying.
The main thing I must say I dislike about Hermione, Ginny and Luna? They all say Harry has "delusions of grandeur" but he will have that, just not in an instant, but they seem to think he dosne't have a chance at it...
"Harry stared at her, his emerald gaze penetrating her wide brown eyes. He saw terror, fear, and apprehension there. His brow furrowed. He saw that Ginny had clearly made the mistake of believing that they were rid of Voldemort. "He's coming back, Ginny," Harry said softly, his voice almost a whisper. "There was never any doubt of that. He's not…human, anymore. He's obsessed with immortality, and he's corrupted his body so much that he was able to survive two reflected Killing Curses. His spirit is still out there. All it needs is a body.""
I forgot to add this in my post in the first book, but since another was reflected, wouldn't Voldemort be weaker than his canon counterpart? Because he was turned into a wraith or spirit from that with little to no brain power, etc, I would've said it would've been atleast until OOTP that he would've been at his canon level of strength before he recieved a new body, anyways...
Will he get a final title for Daphne? He alternates between mother and guardian...
Also, will he ever tell her what he saw in the ritual? As I think that's something that could bring them closer, well, you aid she thinks Harry is the second closest persn to her a while back, so... )
During the Siege of Hogwarts, James nearly lost his life when he helped rescue two Third Years that were trapped in a collapsing building. Lily and Sirius yelled for him to leave them, but he refused to give up. Both survived, eventually married and had families of their own.
I have a feeling you might add this in later at some point, maybe not though...
The attack on the Longbottoms hadn't been the worst of the whole war. Indeed, their was great debate to this day as to which had been the most brutal and cruel. Harry believed it had been the raid on O'Connor Sanctuary. Daphne had done her best to prevent him from learning the details, but the memory of the O'Connors' bodies had reportedly caused hardened veterans to shudder with fear and revulsion decades after the fact.
This is what has me truly iffy. The Longbottoms are meant to be the worst fate that happened in the HP world, JK Rowling said it herself, having Daphne's family eclipse it just points more to the marysue direction people complain about-like the lisence for the unforgiavables.
I hope you have Harry defeat Bellatrix- what annoyed me was how Molly beat Bellatrix, tbh.
When I first saw the "let go" bit in the christmas event, I thought it would mean let go meaning the Priori with James/Lily, etc...
| Ongil Nyatar chapter 18 . 10/24/2010
I've started read your stories a few days ago, and I really like it so far.
This Harry is very different, and the story is now really far from the canon and I suppose it is still going to increase.
Daphne is a very strange character in my opinion, a really interesting one in fact, and your Luna is not bad, also.
And, as a French, (and I apologize if I've done mistakes in this message), I really enjoy all the references to France or French you've done, especially because perfectly true and accurate, which is not that common in English fanfiction.
I've seen the foolowing story is stopped for now, but I hope you will have time to continue it as soon as it is possible !
| HowlFox chapter 25 . 2/13/2010
In one word. Epic, ive read I to IV in a day or so and its a really riveting take on a slytherin harry. Personally as my favorite potterverse character is James, your portayal of harry's views of his parents is one of the best ive read in slytherin harry stories where typically harry views one if his parents (commonly Lily) as a mary-sue type character, but instead you have done a fanastic job of making him more detahced from his parents, mainly due to...
Your OC the Grey Maiden, shes the perfect 'shades of grey' character to cause the changes in harry.
I cant really find too much critisism, which is good or even conatructive critisism (sorry!) But at least just when i was beginning to warm to Snape's overall character you remind me why i dont like him (Thankyou!) hes a just creepy chracter in general.
| Firestorm2408 chapter 25 . 10/26/2009
Wow... Simply amazing story work here!
I've read from I to IV all of today, I simply was UNABLE to put it down. I'm really looking forward to the next installment of the grey maiden series - good luck with it!
| Ag Surfer chapter 18 . 10/11/2009
Let's start with the good. I've been reading your series non-stop and can't seem to put it down, because you have created a VERY unique set of circumstances here for HP. I like your characters, and I feel you have a good grasp on the way they should interact.
That said, I did not like the way that Daphne and Harry basically steam-rolled over the wishes of the Headmaster of Hogwarts. She basically threatened him and I agree with McGonagall that she was showing Albus little to no respect whatsoever. There should have been more discussion and less dictating of terms here, imho.
It seems that the Headmaster of this school is powerless to attach any kind of consequence to Harry's BLATANT breaking of one of the school's most clear-cut rules: No students are allowed to duel. How about if Harry loses fifty house points and gets 2 weeks detention for every slip up he makes? What if he gets kicked off the Quidditch Team for glaring?
I mean, since even the threat of expulsion would result in, “...the Pureblood Assembly having Albus' head on a platter.”
Your story is very good, author. The fact that I'm greatly annoyed having read this is credit to what you have been able to do with nothing more than your creativity and a word processing program.
But yes, that little scene there could have been handled a whole lot better.
The duel itself though WAS excellent - I have to say I'm not sorry to see Draco have his buttocks handed to him - in front of the whole school, no less.