Oh my GOSH. I love this chapter too. I actually cried when 8 yr old Sarah cried after her parent's divorce. And Jareth-oh God JARETH-the almighty and merciless Goblin King, is completely under Sarah's spell! He's absolutely whipped for her! It's so goddamn adorable and laughable but this more than makes up for how evil Jareth seemed to be in the beginning of this story.

Oh no that's scary the humans are disappearing from the edge of the Labyrinth!

Such a good intro with Jareth and the foreboding warning of change coming.

I loved it!

The ending killed me though.

However I know there is a sequel and I know it is unfinished. But I will still read it and love in hope that it will be finished. Your storywriting skills are a treasured gift the world should not be deprived of.

Thank you for writing this.

I'm liking your story a lot. And i am liking how each chapter works. I like a slow burn and I feel you have nailed it. It's tantalising. And even though it's 1030 at night and past my bedtime all I want to do is keep reading. :)

I'm loving this soooo much.

I'm loving the build up. I love slow burns rather than BOOM action. A but of world and character building can go along way to making a good story and I can tell this a good story :)

I stumbled on this while reading through fanfics as is my guilty pleasure.
You are a very good writer and this story will haunt me.
I know you posted it 7 years ago, and perhaps no longer even write such stories. But I truly hope you haven't given up on the magic of this world and are still creating.

Jareth's dad is MVP. He is truly a benevolent King, to go out of his way to help solve matters concerning Toby. I'm really scared for the boy. Could it be that the Underground left an imprint on Toby as an infant, creating a connection between the two, and now that he Labyrinth is changing wildly, Toby is too? I'm also having doubts with Jareth's shade. Although he seems loyal to Jarerh, I couldn't help but feel that this creature had its own agenda, and may possibly be that ominous thing we've been worried about. Hmm...

This chapter is making me love Jareth's family more and more. The twins are so full of energy; it's no doubt exasperating for the servants there. They have such a boyish charm to them, and I love how they're so friendly with Sarah, just like the rest of Jareth's family is toward her. I really do wish Sarah could stay. I think she really wants to, but she's held back because of her family. If only there was a way to compromise.

His chapter was delightful through and through! All of Jareth's family members are absolutely charming and oh so very unique. I love how you didn't go the usual route of making them look similar to him, seeing that they're the same species. It's like the dog or cat breeds. There's no one look, they can look vastly different! I love how each family member has a likeness to an element of nature. They must be so ethereally beautiful. What's even better is that these beings are all aboard the JS ship, oh boy oh boy :D

I do wonder how this story is going to end, now that there are less than ten chapters left. It only seems like things are really gaining traction now - like, the actual adventure is starting. Then again, adventure isn't a genre of this story. I'm just hoping this doesn't feel rushed at the end. You've given so much great and enthralling material in these chapters; it'd be a waste if the ending was lackluster. I'm only saying this because of what happened in Bodice Ripper... That story was written so amazingly, until I read the ending, and then I kind of felt like I hit a brick wall. There could have been so much more to the story... Enough of that though. I do have a sequel to look forward to, but then again it's incomplete, and has been for eight years now. );

I think a slight addition can be added to that title, "In Which the Author Needlessly Tortures Jareth and Her Readers Again" Seriously, do you have this sadistic pleasure when you interrupt Jareth and Sarah's romantic sessions? It's absolute torture I tell you! (I write this in the most endearing way possible btw) I really hope you have an amazing, mind-blowing, steamy scene in store for us Ergott!

I love the dad. Fudging love him. He's the captain of the JS ship, or perhaps Karen is. Well, they both are. Thank goodness he regards Sarah favorably! And that dialogue him and Jareth had... That was so sweet. I love how he's an encouraging father to him.

Oh and it was so cute to see Jareth saying "It's not fair" this time haha~ his petulance was overflowing lol and that was such a tender moment when he rested his head on Sarah's shoulder after they were interrupted. I really liked that. :)

WOW WHAT A TEASE YOU ARE AT THE LAST SCENE. THAT WAS A LOW BLOW. In Sarah's words, "It's not fair!" lol Don't worry though, there's no hard feelings. It added humor to the whole thing. Lemme just say though, you're damn good at these scenes. Just. Hot. Damn. You are probably the best writer I've come across for M rated works of Labyrinth. Seriously.

However, I do have a mild complaint over the layout of the chapter though. You see, as the female reader, you sort of get this vicarious pleasure from reading this lascivious scene in Sarah's point of view. It feels different when reading from Jareth's point of view, so when you have the two perspectives being traded back and forth, it kind of disrupts the build-up and flow of the reader's own feelings. I think it would have been better if you wrote Sarah's perspective in one chapter, and then carried Jareth's perspective in the next chapter immediately, vice versa. From a stylistic standpoint the structure of this chapter is creative, and I do appreciate it! It's just that as the reader wanting to y'know... get a feel for what Sarah's feeling... it's a little distracting. I must admit though, this back and forth thing did work well for the very last paragraphs, as it did help to add that bit of humor in the end. :)

Now for the rest of the story! I do sense that something ominous is going to happen, but there's so many things going on simultaneously it's hard to figure out what it is exactly. We have Jareth experiencing great fear, Jareth's shade making Labyrinth more forbidding than it was before, Toby being erratic that it seems like he's possessed (I'm still getting creeped out man), and then there are those dream shadow things we still have to worry about. I can't seem to string everything together to make a proper prediction. The story's still mysterious and we're already over 30 chapters in! Oh, and I realize the note warning Sarah in the prior chapter is not written by the same being that wrote the two previous notes. Oops haha~

Btw, I really liked that scene where Sarah was feeling all the emotions Jareth was feeling. It was short, but intense! You could really see how volatile Jareth's emotions are.

I FRIGGIN FELT LIKE I WAS WATCHING THE EXORCIST OR SOMETHING DURING THAT WHOLE TOBY SCENE. I WAS GETTING SCARED. What in the world is going on with the little boy? This is so ominous! I hope he'll turn out okay in the long run...

Anyway, I'm feeling excited as Sarah's honing in on her magic! I especially loved how she was starting to feel the connection she had with Jareth! That's some nice imagery there. I love how you can put in words how and what Sarah feels as this magic is coursing through her. Now that I think about it, I contend that describing magic that's being consciously created, manipulated, and unleashed by the caster is an easier task for a writer to do than describing how involuntary magic feels within a person, and you certainly do a swell job with the latter. This scene also excited me because now that Sarah can feel Jareth's emotions, this means he's more transparent to her, more vulnerable. She's essentially able to see through any kind of arrogant, cool guise he may be putting up to save face, so look forward to how she'll react and how this'll affect her own feelings. ;)

AND YO, WHO THE FRICK IS THE ONE WRITING THOSE OMINOUS NOTES. At first I thought it was Jareth, but now it seems like it's someone else. Is it the shadows? And who or what in the world are these shadows? Still so many mysteries to be solved!

Ooh, this chapter has more characters than usual. Nice! Is this stand-in for Jareth an Underground creature, or is it a creation of his? I assumed Jareth created a sort of a copy of himself that could preside of the court meetings. But then we have this "shade" referring to Jareth as "my lord" which begs me to think it's probably the former. How nice to have a loyal servant like that shade. :)

Poor Toby... I'm wondering if his dream has a connection to Sarah's situation. Perhaps the shadows are present in his dreams too now?

That scene between Jareth and his father was so cute! I honestly thought Jareth's parents had already passed away, oops. And my prediction of the shadow that healed Sarah is wrong then. Could it really have been Jareth? Anyway, I love how the father was teasing Jareth. I love scenes like this where you realize someone as great and formidable as Jareth is still a child when put beside his father or mother haha~

With the presence of these new characters, I wonder if Hoggle, Sir Didymus, and Ludo will ever make an appearance. I find it a little disconcerting that Sarah hasn't made any mention of them since the time she saw them in her dreams. That chapter had really brought my hopes up that they would show up soon...

I'm so glad Sarah was given a proper explanation about how time in the Underground was different from Aboveground, and how that played into how the hourglass worked. Finally cleared up my confusion! Thanks for that. :)