|Reviews for Condemning the Innocent|
| man boat chapter 12 . 9/11/2016
TL;DR: Condemning the Innocent is unintentionally hilarious and cringe-filled. However, it's still a massive improvement over the first. 5/10.
When I wrote my review for the first I thought this was going to be even worse, however, it's a pleasant surprise. I feel it does a better job than the first with the WBWL trope.
I better start off with the negatives, and while they don't swamp this one like they did the first, there are still tons of things I almost downright hated in this story. One thing is that the pets returned, but then disappeared after the second line, so it was bearable. There are still pacing issues, with entire years being skipped over in a chapter or even half a chapter (Fifth Year). The characters are still one dimensional, but DaggersBloodPain actually focused on the main characters to make up for that slightly. VERY SLIGHTLY. The grammar and spelling issues also come up again at around Chapter 5, which was a real shame as at the beginning they were almost nowhere to be found.
There are also cringe-inducing elements in this fan fiction, just like the last. One of these is the relationship between Aidan and Cedric. While I do not have an inherent problem with slash relationships, I have a problem with how cringe-filled they tend to be. And this was relationship was the pinnacle of cringe, especially in Chapter 10, which is by FAR the worst chapter in the entire story.
Thankfully, there are more positives than the last, as the opening was extremely strong and the writing is much more descriptive than the last, which I welcomed wholeheartedly. The opening also doesn't have as many grammatical issues as the latter part of the fic. Aidan's coming out speech is also hilarious, intentionally or not.
Overall, this is a huge improvement over the first, even if it is still average. The characters are still one dimensional, even more so. The relationships are cringe-inducing and there are a lot of unintentionally hilarious moments. However, the writing is a lot better than the first, even if the pacing is a bit iffy. Would I recommend this? No. Maybe to people who like a good laugh. It gets a 5/10.
| PenguinGirl94 chapter 6 . 12/18/2015
Umm.. here you say that Aiden (Harry) had to work to be good a potions while Draco is a natural at it... but I swear in the first story it was the other way around. I don't know what chapter..
| daithi4377 chapter 12 . 3/12/2014
Ha looks good on them, they really should have realized a long time ago.
| daithi4377 chapter 11 . 3/12/2014
Well at least they won't have to worry about Rose, sorry she died but really I'm surprised she lasted this long.
| daithi4377 chapter 10 . 3/12/2014
I'm surprised be has been able,etc to keep that mark hidden. Albus homophobic that's a good one lol
| daithi4377 chapter 8 . 3/12/2014
LOL what does it matter who turns you on. It's not like your sexuality makes any difference to your magic or power. And thanks to his ex family's its not going to really hurt his reputation.
| daithi4377 chapter 7 . 3/12/2014
The godfather I take it are Remus and Sirius, if that is the case the Potters lost more than they realize.
| daithi4377 chapter 6 . 3/12/2014
Malfoys in the muggle world and enjoying it...shocking lol
| daithi4377 chapter 5 . 3/12/2014
LOL he does seem to gather these young girls, request and helps them. Hannah in first year now Ginny in second year.
| daithi4377 chapter 4 . 3/12/2014
| daithi4377 chapter 3 . 3/12/2014
So there stupidity grew over the summer eh? Should make for an interesting year.
| daithi4377 chapter 2 . 3/12/2014
It's a pity that since he is so close to mastery level in his classes that he couldn't just go ahead and take his newts, but I guess then he wouldn't have the hope of rubbing his ex family's face into the knowledge of just what they
| daithi4377 chapter 1 . 3/12/2014
Not withstanding the scars Aiden sounds gorgeous. Wonder if draco will get parseltongue.
| Kingdom Hearts KeyBlade chapter 7 . 11/26/2013
wow this is a good story!
| Haruchan-chan chapter 13 . 8/11/2013