|Reviews for Naked|
| Stuffwell359 chapter 5 . 8/14/2014
Great story! Loved the plot, and your story looked much more polished near the end :) at the beginning...well, let's say it needed work. But, you pulled yourself together on the last two chapters, kudos to you :)
| Angelic Land chapter 5 . 8/13/2014
Wow this story turned out so sweet! I loved it so much!
| Angelic Land chapter 4 . 8/13/2014
Woah again. Really hotness happening! But poor Chaud holy crap. If Lan really loves him, he won't think he's disgusting or a whore if he was raped.
| Angelic Land chapter 2 . 8/13/2014
Woah! This is scary but good.
| Angelic Land chapter 1 . 8/13/2014
This is so cute. I like it a lot.
| Riku Evans chapter 5 . 5/25/2008
I'm glad it had a happy ending. This was very good.
| Riku Evans chapter 1 . 5/25/2008
I like this so far. Chaud's personality is cute. He's not really the one I would expect to see fall all over a guy. I think that makes it even better.
| Litintha chapter 5 . 5/1/2008
Well...How do I put this lightly.
To start, the storyline was good. It was easy to see where you were going with it. Also, the pairing of LanxChaud and MegamanxProtoman were ok.
However, this story was plagued with problems. For starters, way too much slang. It pained me to read the "text messages" Lan and Chaud sent to each other.
Secondly, too much dialog. I, myself, like it when dialog is used in a story. I think that it can sometimes be more important than the actual descriptions. However, you needed A LOT less dialog and more descriptive details.
Thirdly, Lan and Chaud. Let's be serious here. Chaud was the personification of what people consider a "gay" boy/man to be. Lip gloss? Body glitter? Girl pants? Sorry, but that really doesn't paint a good image. As for Lan, well...he was basically a 16 year old White Knight. Additionally, their attitudes were completely different from what they probably should have been, In my opinion, Lan and Chaud were taken way out of context.
Lastly, Megaman and Protoman. Alright. They can be a good pairing. There is no debating that. However, both of them when they first meet...well...words cannot describe it.
To end: I think one of the major problems was the excessive amount of slang that was used, along with the too much dialog. The characters were also not the best, and not quite developed well enough.
Granted, this is a fanfic, and you did have a great idea for a plot/storyline. However, in my opinion, it was just poorly implemented.
| Izzy.33 chapter 5 . 11/29/2007
okay.. let's get a few things straight:
chaud isn't a girl! so why does he act like one(and rather slutty one i might add)?
and what's with protoman and megaman being so rude?
and hell! lan certainly isn't a casanova!
the plot was quite good though, i liked the OC, he's character was well exposed
i also enjoyed your lemons - but maybe you'd like to add some more comparisons and descriptions in this? this way it all happened rather quickly...
but to answer your question about part two, i say 'NO!' if you really want to then please make a list of what is typical to each person and when you got some idea to write in a story, check first if it goes with this man's usual behaviour otherwise please write in 'warnings' that some characters are ooc
| Soultiger333 chapter 5 . 9/17/2007
great story needs more to it though
| Sharingan Kyuubi chapter 5 . 9/6/2007
Well... it was a cute story... but why was everything all "ghetto"? I mean... I guess... I can kinda of see Lan being Ghetto... but Protoman, Chaud and Megaman... just imagining it... (well is enough to make one laugh their arse off to be honest) but still... out of curiosity, what's with the "ghetto gangster" thing? Other then that, it's a nice story, just the weird "slag" throws everything off and sets the characters way OOC, but as I said, other then that, it's nice.
| Alliecard chapter 5 . 8/5/2007
Maybe you should do a part two of Lan's pov?
| ExplainThisKlarissa chapter 5 . 8/4/2007
make a megamanxbass! uke bass! and you could make protoman rape him because he loves megaman.
| NotJim chapter 4 . 6/10/2007
You either are a really good troll or a really, REALLY, bad writer.
In either case, just... go die in a fire.
| xXxSAITOxXx chapter 1 . 6/10/2007
Please. Just...just stop.