I was sent here because of the story "Harry Crow" and I'm so glad I came. This was an amazing ride from start to finish. I've gone through and read most of your stories now and although this was the only one I commented on you should know that they've all been good. I usually ship Harry with Hermione but...I'm coming around, mostly due to this story. It deserves every favorite it gets.

Tt

Overall this was a very interesting piece. I was rather amused by how things resolved themselves throughout the story. I also quite enjoyed the relationship that developed between Harry and Susan. Several parts of this surprised me and I really enjoyed how it went its own direction. Unfortunately there were also several bits of confusion and typos that I noticed. Of course there was also that odd time jump after Harry was injured right before the start of the school year. It almost felt like it was missing a chapter right there. Thankfully most of my questions were resolved within that chapter. At any rate I did enjoy the story and look forward to reading more works from you.

There is also the mention of Rabastan Lestrange being stopped by Scrimgour in this chapter. I thought he died in the court room battle or the veil of death afterwards. So much confusion when it comes to that family.

Unfortunately I have discovered yet another typo. Unless this is a different character, Randi was introduced in chapter two as Randi Bell. Here she introduces herself as Randi Estling. Of course that could be her married name, but that really should be added to her first introduction if that's the case.

One of the Lestrange brothers died in two different places this chapter. I think the other died during the court room battle.

Ok, another error I noticed is that Jugson is supposed to be death at this point. It was mentioned early in the story, like chapters 1-3, that he had died from his wounds in the DoM time room. However here he is alive in court and attacking Aurors.

Well it seems that the date confusion has been fixed in this chapter. It started with the same day (Saturday) that the last chapter ended on dated as the 3rd rather than the 2nd.

Ok so there's this error, or at least I think it's an error, that I want to mention. At the beginning of the chapter it was dated Thursday August 1st. However towards the end there is another dated section that is listed as August 2nd and then says Saturday morning. Now there was also something said about Monday being August 5th at the end of the last chapter. Friday would be the 2nd so I just thought you should know about this minor error with the dates.

Yi

Tr

Very mean-spirited w.r.t. Ron. I don’t really like him but he didn’t deserve that fate.

Great story!
Thanks!

Great story. Thank you for writing this.

This story was good but I still feel bad for Ron.