|Reviews for Project God|
| dj chapter 3 . 4/1/2013
| kahill.shore chapter 9 . 12/1/2012
This is an amazing story...and it just stoped...WHY! :'[
| Project X chapter 2 . 1/29/2010
Celsius Virus, thats a really cool name. And so far this story is awesome! I'll continue reading then post a full review at the end, but still its really cool!
| NotRevolutionZwei chapter 9 . 7/14/2009
Oh geez...Excella is ever the sneaky one. I am curious to see what her choice will be too...I'm assuming Wesker, but I dunno. Clearly I don't know much about RE5 (especially who this Ricardo guy is lol), but it's cool to see what changes you are making and such. Even better that you haven't changed everything, yet it's still pretty damn different, which is hard to pull off lol.
Well, The Red Rogue is supposed to be next, but you already have so much on your plate, it'll probably get put on the back burner for now. Which, while I'd like to see what happens next because I pretty much totally forgot, it'll have to wait for another time. Overall, I think the rewrite was a success, and love the justice you've served to the orginal. Looking forward to more whenever you decide to continue!
| RevolutionZwei chapter 8 . 7/14/2009
Man, this whole chapter sure does leave me with a depressing feeling...yeah, The Hammer is totally brutal and all that, but Thruman is definitely the worst. After doing what he did, all he could do afterwards was laugh like he was happier than anything in the world? Geez...he's got like...no emotions at all. Literally, now that Leon decimated him lol.
And Sherry...wow. All I can say is wow lol. I don't remember her destroying The Hammer like she did in the original...then again, I can't really remember that far back lol. And hey, it was pretty awesome when her anger made the G-Virus do what she did...Leon too for that matter, even if it was different. Because we got to see Striker, and Striker makes me happy...lol.
Anyway, this chapter was pretty nuts and violent to boot...but, I knew what was coming as soon as I read the A/N. Poor Rose and Pearl...gives me shivers just thinking about what happened. Great work on the descriptions and stuff though...almost made me squeamish for a minute lol.
| Arktos chapter 9 . 7/9/2009
Okay, where to start... I'm Arktos, your friendly neighbourhood constructive critic. Nothing here is meant to be mean, personal, etc. This is simply me pointing out mistakes and other problems in the story; I give credit where credit is due, but I'm also not afraid to bring up the things that bother me. That said, I'll get on with the review.
To start, I guess I should address some of the biggest faults in the story. First, too many supporting OCs. They were introduced so quickly at one point I barely kept them straight, and actually sighed in relief when some of them died, because then I could follow the story better. Pearl and Rose were the worst, serving no other purpose than giving Leon and Sherry the right amount of angst to kick... uh... Minor Boss Mook #2's butt (see? I can't even remember his name now! That's a bad sign). I couldn't remember whether Pearl was the clone or Rose was, and I was very irritated when that huge chunk of their background you PAUSED THE STORY to tell us didn't become important. They weren't developed, and I honestly didn't care about them, however harsh that sounds. Conservation of detail, my friend. It's important.
Anyways, Shiver was okay if a bit out of place (What the heck was he doing there again? Did he really serve any purpose in moving the plot along?). Sherry was cool, except acted kinda...on the rag half the time, if you know what I mean, which made her difficult to relate to. Ada was...well, to put it truthfully, way out of character (if she really cared about Leon being bashed around that much, why did she leave him in Bitores' clutches? Why did she hold a LOADED gun to his head? She does care about him, but it's more like a 'oh, it's Leon. Better TRY to keep him alive, he MAY be useful' kind of deal. Note the emphasized words. Granted, she's not entirely apathetic to his fate, but...crying for him? Does Ada even seem capable of crying anymore? If she's upset, she's not going to show it, even when she's alone. That's just how she is).
Next, I honestly felt you could have streamlined the story a LOT more and tried to make it more logical. Ashley and Leon were captured for...some reason, Leon's now a test subject, Wesker is in charge of this unsubtly named 'Project God', and Leon, Ashley and a bunch of other people are trying to escape while Ada's offering nothing useful to the plot and Krauser's wandering around aimlessly somewhere. That's all I got out of nine chapters. NINE CHAPTERS. All of which could have been spent building up suspense and developing characters more, not to mention giving them a reason to be there.
Why did Wesker choose LEON of all people anyways? You know, the guy who has a history of surviving impossible situations and a vendetta against him? And connections with the White House? Even more baffling, why take Ashley? He'll have the National Guard after him in no time, if her father learned anything from the last kidnapping! That's not the sneaky Wesker I'm used to seeing. I mean, maybe bringing logic into the RE series is kind of silly (lava pits in your family heirloom of a castle? What is that really needed for, Salazar? Why and how did a castle even get constructed around a dormant volcano originally, unless you dug deep enough with technology yet to be invented back then?), but it's just way too convoluted a plot.
And now, for the good parts. Leon's power, however improbably he received it, is awesomely creepy. His devotion to Ashley in this is amazing, but believable. His whole development is pretty in character and intriguing to watch. He is, in essence, the most interesting source of conflict in this story. It's just a shame you didn't focus a bit more on Ashley's perspective and use that friendship/sense of duty between them as more of a driving force in the story. If you built up the new Sherry and Shiver (why is he called that? He deserves something better!) a bit more, and used the 'Ashley, Sherry and Shiver' dynamic versus the 'Leon and Ashley' one more, you'd have a solid internal conflict to work with. Leon and Shiver have already settled into a 'warring alpha males' type of relationship, Sherry and Leon already know each other, but I think Leon would be a bit more wary of them (not to mentioned feeling that his relationship with Ashley is threatened). He hasn't seen Sherry in a long time, and for all he knows her alliances have changed (remember Krauser and Ada?). He doesn't know Shiver at all, and Shiver seems intent on leaving him and taking Ashley with them. He's going to resent that, but at the same time feel he's a danger to Ashley's safety and agree with Shiver that he's dangerous. I mean, the reason I made it this far was hoping something like that would play out. If you revise this, do take advantage of that potential.
And that's that! Sorry if I came off as being a little blunt, but I was kind of disappointed. In my opinion, this is DEFINITELY a salvagable concept, but it needs some major retooling and more thought put into how the 'parts' of the story fit together.
| MarnaLouw89 chapter 9 . 5/13/2009
YAY! but aw, now i have to wait two weeks...*sob*...*weeps*
Great chapter! Good ol Excella...*shakes head* XD
Bravo to an awesome PG rewrite! *raises champagne glass*
| MarnaLouw89 chapter 8 . 5/12/2009
Man poor ROSE and Pearl!
OH my 'bad boy' Striker got out! Whoo *wiggles eyebrows at him* XD
LOVED IT! I am so freaking glad for this! Makes me feel a lot better!
Thanx my fried!
| RevolutionZwei chapter 7 . 5/10/2009
Ugh...I am so late on this...and the others lol. Sorry!
All's I gotta say is...God freaking dammit man...I don't want to see The Hammer! I hate that dude so much! And Thurman too, but...ya know. Mr. Hammer is totally brutal, and that's not cool in this situation lol.
Heh...I liked the lighthearted joking Sherry did with Pearl, even in the face of death. I thought it was especially fitting that she was very friendly and tried to ease the situation, because she herself knows what it's like to be in horrifying situations at a young age. So, nice job on incorporating Sherry's experiances into the mix.
As for whoever opened the door for Leon and Rose, well...I have a few crazy theories on who I think it was...XDD...I'll keep them to myself though lol. Also...I have a feeling that the God Virus had nothing to do with Leon being able to catch her lol...after Spain, I think he's had enough practice catching falling females...
Very awesome update, and I totally wish I would have read it yesterday, but...I was playing games all day lol. Same as today...XD...and I totally wasn't expecting all of these updates you managed to do, but I'm absolutely itching to read the rest lol (DOTA...hell yeah!). Looking forward to the next chapter...maybe lol. Depending on if The Hammer is released...lol.
| MarnaLouw89 chapter 7 . 5/9/2009
Oh GEEZ the Hammer!
Dude...i hate that thing!
_ We all know who the angel behind the camera was, receiving Leon's smile XD
| Summer36 chapter 6 . 5/4/2009
Awesome story hope you continue the great work. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
| MarnaLouw89 chapter 6 . 5/2/2009
Oh boy oh boy! I feel like a kid in a candy store!
I love this so freaking much! *gets crazy look* Need more...i... ...i NEED IT! *grabs hair* XD
Oh wait...oh no something terrible is gona happen if i remember correctly...*sob* aww dammit...no.
LOVED IT! I want more! XD
| RevolutionZwei chapter 6 . 5/2/2009
Modified zombies huh? Is that what those things were? lol...I don't honestly remember from the original. I think that Leon seemed to have been taken over by...something there for a minute lol. When he blacked out while fighting, I mean.
Ahh, the friggin' Hammer! Why? Why...oh, why that guy? lol...damn...well, from what I remember, the first installment of PG is just about complete. Just a couple more key events have to take place. And yay for bringing in Steve and Krauser! But boo for Malcolm lol...that guy is a complete jerk, and I hate him!
I like how this chapter explored Leon's power a bit more...that God Virus sounded crazy before, but Leon doesn't even feel pain anymore? That's pretty awesome lol...I guess I shouldn't worry about him being bitten by a (modified) zombie too much, right? Seeing as he's already infected? lol
Anyways, I'm lovin' the PG awesomeness D! I'm looking forward to Excella's appearance too! Thanks for adding her! Screw what RE5 says, right? XDD...Okay, sorry for the terrible review D lol...I pretty much just woke up though. Just be assured that I loved it of course, and I love PG! And it's awesome that I'm getting to read the revamped version. Oh, AND I'm looking forward to the next installment!
| RevolutionZwei chapter 5 . 4/26/2009
Boring chapter? Just because there were no fights or anything, doesn't make it boring. Pretty informational, actually lol.
Rose and Pearl are still awesome lol. Yes, they totally rock...*Sigh*...don't want to think about...you know lol. And they're oh so adorable...Rose wasn't afraid of Leon at all lol. And I liked how she bandaged his arm too...XD
Although, it certainly makes Wesker look like more of a bastard. Experimenting on children? Not cool at all Wesker. Although Rose and Pearl's parents are just as bad for what they did.
As always, Sherry and Shiver's interaction was great lol. She just hauled off and knee'd his ass...XD...and hooray for Ada still watching Leon! Aw...she still cares lol. Krauser...well, I won't knock Krauser at all lol...he's cool in PG. At least...he was. Dunno about the rewrite...XD
Loved the addition D! Looking forward to some more love tossed in PG's direction, ya know?
| MarnaLouw89 chapter 5 . 4/26/2009
Holy $HIT! When I saw this update everything else just disappeared XD
I FKING LOVE this fic, did I ever tell you that? XD
Great chapter once again! I love Rose and Pearl! Especially Rose!
I cannot wait for more!