|Reviews for Evil Town|
| EachPeachPearPlum chapter 7 . 5/17/2008
quickest review possible here. which, knowing me, is somehow gonna turn out even longer than normal. although the ones you've been getting haven't been all that long...
conveniently placed mention of Doctor Who, seeing as that's where i'm vanishing to. to watch it, i mean. three minutes now. quick quick quick!
most interesting. have Kyo-kun and Haa-kun actually met. cos you had Kyo-kun saying/thinking something about him, but i didn't realise they'd ever met...anyway, most interesting fic...
reading the next chapter sometime around eightish...
| EachPeachPearPlum chapter 6 . 5/17/2008
so they caught the nastiness. i think...but how's everyone else. Yuki and Ian and all them. and the important people, like Kyo-kun and Rin...
and chapter seven...
| EachPeachPearPlum chapter 5 . 5/17/2008
rather worried now. i'm almost pitying Yuki. think it's all the bruises and whatever. poor guy. although he did sort of ask for it...
and now to chapter six. wish i had something worthwhile to say...
| EachPeachPearPlum chapter 4 . 5/17/2008
so what exactly is Yun-Yun getting revenge for? that's the only thing i've yet to work out. well, there's a few others, but that one seems to be most crucial to the plot...
and now to chapter five...
| EachPeachPearPlum chapter 3 . 5/17/2008
yay! someone else who realises Yuki is evil. me finks it should be made public knowledge. everyone should see his nastiness and hate him for it...
nah, he's not really all *that* bad in the manga, but not my fave character...
this is some combo of interesting a slightly bizarre. but i'm still reading, so you must have done something right...
| EachPeachPearPlum chapter 2 . 5/17/2008
rather pleased things are gonna get explained in the next chapter. i'm way too confused...
still carrying on...
| EachPeachPearPlum chapter 1 . 5/17/2008
for that matter, why did she want to talk to him? sorry, must try keep my nastiness to a minimum. but Yuki is a twat...
interesting beginning. guess i'll carry on reading...
| quixotomy chapter 12 . 4/3/2008
Wow, your writing is just amazing. It's really a shame that this hasn't got more reviews: I've seen absolutely crappy fanfic writers who get hundreds of reviews for a story that is cliched and badly written. This is neither, yet is not appreciated to that degree. If only people could open their eyes to the possibility of originality.
This chapter I liked a lot. I usually skim over the parts that haven't got Tohru/Rin in them, but I was engrossed in most of this. Your descriptions are short but beautifully effective, and the characterization is spot-on, yet everyone has an interesting twist in their character that makes them your own.
Good luck with your writing, I hope you update soon.
PS: when you're writing numbers, it's better to say one, two, three etc, instead of 1, 2, 3. Well, that's what I think. For me it just continues the flow of the narrative.
| Guest chapter 12 . 4/2/2008
Thought I should just drop a review again...
There's really nothing to say though, other than keep up the good work and update soon.
| Running to my Heart chapter 11 . 2/1/2008
I really like this story so far! It's got all of the elements I look for in a good thriller! Please, keep writing on this story, it's begging to be finished!
| dishrag-chan chapter 11 . 1/30/2008
Very nice. Good writing as always. Things are getting a lot more interesting...
| Guest chapter 11 . 1/29/2008
Er...I'm sorry that I forgot to review?
Yes, lame, but I did kind of..
Either way, I like how your relationships are starting to hold more in place now. And still the introduction of new characters! Will they never end? (not that I'll be complaining)
Can't think of anything else to say. This is really good.
Update, I guess.
| lotus head chapter 7 . 9/23/2007
:O And it I! With a tragically late review! Pardon moi! ...you know. I'm taking French. It is downright evil!
I like the Rin/Tohru friendship. They're terribly cute together. Ooh! I love the Yeah Yeah Yeahs. Awesomes.
Best line: "The rain continues to plummet down on her image, twisting it with each splatter and ripple. She begins walking. Each step, her feet remain mostly submerged in the cool flow." It's so poetic! You're so fantastic! Squee!
The way you write each paragraph section thingy is fantastic- it's action-packed and tapers off to very descriptive, calm.
...eh. That was a very long and disjointed review... keep it up! :D Update soon~!
| quixotomy chapter 6 . 9/11/2007
I really do love this story. I've decided to review each chapter every time I have something to say, so here goes-
If you like Rin/Tohru, there's a story I read recently, called 'The Onigiri, The Horse and The Ox' or something similar. The author's name is hollylizzy, I think. It's quite good, but needs some work, and I thought that since you're a great writer you could give her some tips, since I can never manage to give advice without coming off as condescending.
And are Arisa and Saki going to be involved in this? And the rest of the Sohma family? Because they're all pretty good characters, and I always feel sad when they're not all included, for some reason. But if that's not part of the ulterior plot, it's fine.
Continue to write with your usual amount of greatness, please!
| quixotomy chapter 9 . 9/6/2007
Ooh. So this is Kyou/Yuki? Well, I've never liked that pairing but I'll read this story because you're a great writer, and I like the Tohru/Rin pairing.
So is Rin bisexual or full out gay? And what about Tohru? If she's never felt this way for a girl before, then she'll be really confused. Not to mention scared of feeling like that. Well, that's what I would feel.