|Reviews for Painful Memories|
| James Birdsong chapter 7 . 6/25/2008
| momoiiey chapter 5 . 12/17/2007
great story i really like it cant wait to see what happens next.
| MysticAutumn chapter 1 . 7/11/2007
lol,I love how you entered Touga in it, you completley captured his character. And to the comment prior to mine, why don't you just enjoy the story rather than getting hung up on stupid things like spellcheck?Well anyways, I'm enjoying your story and I'm curious about this Ame .
| Ivy-chan chapter 2 . 3/1/2007
You asked for concrit, so here it is: you could try running this through a spell check before posting it. It lacks punctuation, spelling, and capitalization. Maybe space out your paragraphs to make it easier to read, too. Like this:
Ame woke up screaming, sweating, and scared. Shit, it happened again, the stupid dream.
The same goddamn dream that had no end. Sigh what time is it. (Would be better as 'she sighed and looked at the time, or italicized for thoughts.) Ame rolled over to check her clock. "Ten thirty AM! Then why do I feel so tired? Shit, these dreams are depriving me of sleep, Oh well, at least its Saturday."
(Here an action such as 'she paused'.)
“SHIT ITS SATURDAY!”