|Reviews for Death Comes Quickly|
| khadija chapter 3 . 10/4/2010
THis is soooo good plz right other chapters
| Rena the pirate jedi wizard chapter 3 . 3/21/2010
Hi, I found this. It was interesting. I sorta liked the very last part. "Now he was even more in debt to John. He just thanked God Alex didn't know." I like the way that was stated. It's like Yassen was invested in Alex's life even before they met. This was a good representation of that sort of thing, especially since you both started and finished with mentions of Yassen's debt.
| 32-star chapter 3 . 1/16/2010
you've written this really well.
| Kay chapter 3 . 11/23/2009
Wow, i like this :)
| may chapter 3 . 10/20/2007
I think it's a good story, I'm curious about the next chapters, so pleas keep writing!
| Aldama chapter 3 . 7/23/2007
Great job. You're a good writer.
| Desdynova chapter 1 . 6/5/2007
Yeah, very good fic and I'm enjoying it, but just one thing: Yassen takes a flight to Edinburgh, and then goes to Sayle's compound in Cornwall. Edinburgh is up north in Scotland, and Cornwall is as far south as you can go in the UK, right at the other end of the country. It seems a bit unlikely that anyone would take a flight to Scotland if they wanted to go to Cornwall, and if they did they wouldn't make the journey from Edinburgh to Cornwall by car, because it would take at least 12 hours. Even by train it's still about six. Anyone who wanted to make that journey would take a plane. I know Britain's quite small, but even so you can't make a journey that long in less than a day if you're going by car.
I'm not flaming you, I'm just pointing it out 'cause it seems a little bit odd to British readers. But other than that it's a great fic. Just change Edinburgh to Plymouth and you'll be ok.
| Aceber chapter 3 . 4/6/2007
I liked it. It was good how you incorparated the material from both the film and the books.
By the way, sorry, I nitpick. Apologising in advance.
In Film. Ian Rider first escapes on a motocycle (red). Then, he uses the car. He didn't hear the helicopter 'cause he had the radio turned up.
Also, this is unstated but I think Scorpia are the ones supplying Sayle. It is mentioned by Yassan that he came 'cause "his people" were worried about the plan.
I just thought I'd point those out. Sorry! You can use poetic license if you want.
But your writing technique is good. It is a really plausible lead into the movie.
| Lady Artemist chapter 3 . 1/21/2007
Lovely, simply lovely.
| Deep Fried Cornpuffs chapter 3 . 11/26/2006
It's really good. I like ow you tell it from both of their POV. Keep up the good work!
| Retro-00 chapter 3 . 11/22/2006
-claps- Good ending... I feel a certain Yassen-orientated squeeness coming on! You give him a human side :] One of my favourite stories on here - well done!
| Elves of the Moon chapter 3 . 11/22/2006
Sweet, the Russians feels-
dare I pronounce the word?-
Always knew he falt bad about killing Ian
and thus leaving Alex with no real family
It's a shame Jack is no real relative...
on the other hand, if she were to be real family the curse would've hit her too...
I do call it a curse since they all are killed...
I know, Alex is not dead yet
but maybe thatis because he does not really wants to be one...
A spy I mean, of course he does want to be a 'Rider'
I look forward to the next chapter,
| Elves of the Moon chapter 2 . 11/22/2006
A review since you asked it so nicely o-0'
make that two reviews (smile)
No really, I think the idea fantastic...
a fic featuring Yassen AND Ian! YAy!
I must say, Ian was very lucky up to now.
I ean, Yassen not killing him directly when he was suspicious.
Ah, but we all know that is about to change...
Well, I'm on to the next chapter
(It's already posted so... Yay -love that little word-)
| coolyassen chapter 2 . 11/21/2006
its great! carry on! we want a full story! yassen is just too cool! lol
| Retro-00 chapter 2 . 11/20/2006
Great writing so far. I like your idea of telling Yassen's side of Ian's death and you've written his character well. Maybe have more of the 1st person writing (from Yassen's point of view) because that worked really effectively. The only problem I have with your story is the fact that Discovery (chapter 2's title) has an s in it... Sorry, I'm being finnicky now.. Other than that, it's fab :]