|Reviews for Monochrome Memories|
| Lady Artimes Blaine chapter 2 . 5/22/2013
I am 2 chapters in and all I can say is wow. I hadn't found a story this good for a couple of weeks. Maybe you can give me some tips for my own. I have a story in progress on ff. It's called Destiny of a Dream. Give it a read through and tell me what you think. I need all the help I can get because my dream job is to be a novelist so please help a girl out. pretty please?
| Taeniaea chapter 20 . 9/28/2012
| Guest chapter 13 . 9/28/2012
the story concept is good, but your writing style needs a little work. your perspective is all all over the place and it reading it is like listening to a boring lecture the words are there but theres very little depth. i would recommend you focus on one thing at a time either characters perceptions of the situation or what is actuly happening in the scene. reading shuichi's, youko's, kurama's and hiei's thought on one person then fliping to kagome's thoghts on whats happening is all well and good but your focusing on their thoughts and not what is actuly happening so it seems like nothing is going on. case in point chapter 12 kagome is listing to this demon cutting her into ribbons and you keep saying how she is feeling injured by his words but you never once mention what this mysterious demon is saying, or how he got there, is he using claws or weapons. the feelings are there but there is no reference so it is hard for readers to use their imaginations to fill in the blanks.
sorry, but all the same i do like where your story is coming from
| Li Clark chapter 5 . 8/4/2012
It's pretty good the one thing you need to work on is your spelling and use of grammar. I. Oticed it's kind of choppy and you tend to mix the tenses from time to time. But over all it's really good. Keep it up.
| dimensiontimetraveler chapter 20 . 3/19/2012
ohnoes... kagome died..
| Talia-Naeva chapter 2 . 3/1/2012
-kun is for older male students
| HeartsGuardianSoul L.D.C chapter 20 . 10/4/2011
Yays! Number 100! *Confetti falls* Kudos on the first story I'm off to read the sequel. Ciao. :)
| Sable Scribe chapter 5 . 9/29/2011
I"m rather confused...I've read the manga, and I've never seen any inclination of Kurama/Youko/Suichi being three different beings. I would like to know the sourse that you found this information from.
| Dark Void Princess 21 chapter 1 . 6/26/2011
I'm just going to keep reading. Might leave a review here and there but will give my overall thoughts at the end
| Forbidden Shadow Foxx chapter 20 . 6/21/2011
hey when you said bring her back in another form, maybe you could have her revived but brougth back as a kitsune? Its over done a little yes but i love how you write your storys and i would die a million times to see how you would portray a kitsune kagome! its an idea though and ultimately the story is yours but please consider it!
Ja Mata Silvermist Fox!
Forbidden Shadow Foxx
(My name doesnt totally show my favoritism towards foxes!)
| Cosmic-lover chapter 20 . 6/20/2011
NOOOOOO! *runs around in circles* KAGOME! *cries* it's lucky that there's going to be a sequel or else I'd go and cry in a corner somewhere *sniffles* poor poor Kurama :( But on a happy note I've totally loved reading this story and I bet the sequel will be just as exciting and interesting as this story was :) Awesome job XD
| Nu'est lover chapter 20 . 6/20/2011
TEAR! That was so sad. She should be in another form In the sequel please update it soon
| Eva318 chapter 5 . 6/16/2011
Aww love at first site. Please update soon
| AKARY YAMI chapter 19 . 6/9/2011
is she dead, is there going to be a happy endidng what about kuramas love or her family, what happened pleas conty soon
| YunaNeko chapter 19 . 5/30/2011
Wonderful. Love It. Can't Wait For Next Chapter. UPDATE SOON! GAMBATTE NE:D