Reviews for Tokyo Bay: Nana kai me no deai
estwo-BELiNDiS'love chapter 5 . 3/12/2007
AWEE its short but sweet!
cosplay chan chapter 5 . 12/8/2006
yay! what a cute NanaXRen Fic! i love how it's told from Hachi's POV like the manga. and the japanese subtitling was only slightly confusing, but it did make it a bit more intresting. please write more! maybe a HachiXTakumi Fic?
E for Emma chapter 1 . 11/26/2006
Your story does not "suck," as you say, but there are a few little errors that can be fixed very easily without affecting the overall story. Mostly, they're just grammar-related flaws. Sometimes, for example, the tense switches. For example, "Nana looked at me for a second and switches her view to the Tokyo Bay" has both past (looked) and present (switches) tense. One tense should be used uniformly. There are other instances of that. I don't want to sound mean. I'm an editor by trade, so I'm trained to zero in on little things like that. If you would like me to help fix them, contact me through my profile and we can surely work something out. I'd like to see how this story turns out! I just read volume 4 today, so a what if story like this is interesting.