|Reviews for Whipped|
| xxelvicioso chapter 7 . 2/3
| Fireminer chapter 7 . 11/15/2013
You're a truly good writer, I say. Never before seen this kind of idea before. Marvelous? Hope you continue to write it soon!
| Flynn58 chapter 7 . 10/12/2013
Oh god, please update this at somepoint, Fresh C. I know that eventually you make your way to dead fics and revive them, just please, make it soon. This is a depressing ending, and while I like depressing stories, I don't like depressing stories in the humor/romance genre. This isn't When She Smiles, man.
| BML2400 chapter 4 . 7/14/2013
This almost would've made an appropriate final chapter. Curious to read more.
| Starfire99 chapter 7 . 12/30/2012
You ever going to update this? It's been SEVEN MONTHS now since a new chapter was posted.
| Kaiki chapter 1 . 11/2/2012
Definitely like where things are going, old premise done in a new way. Using Shinji's socially awkward self to do something other than frustrate the audience to death is nice too.
| The Polyethylene Man chapter 7 . 11/1/2012
I hope Shinji's capable of understanding something complex as an idiot's guide.
| Adam Epp chapter 7 . 8/19/2012
This has been one of my favorite comedy fics on FFN for a while now, and I recently caught up to the latest chapters. It's still good, but I think the pacing could be improved a lot, as the plot has been progressing quite slowly and it feels slower with each chapter. In the newest chapter, I wasn't a big fan of the simulation fights between the pilots. For one, the characterization felt off, and I thought it overemphasized Shinji's excessive passivity in your fic (which tends to stray a bit too far from the original work as it is), and the conflict resulting from the scene came across as too artificial and contrived, as a result. But, personally, I tend to think that fic writers should just have serious character reactions to actual life-or-death battles, or not-so-serious ones to fake battles, or just not have any battles at all if the story focuses on a relationship.
In general, I'd say the Kaji-Shinji scenes are the best parts of this fic. I do like the way you've been developing the Asuka-Shinji relationship, even if Shinji's wimpiness can be so extreme in your fic that it makes me wonder why Asuka would stick with him (or vice versa). I do hope to see you finish this one day, and that you don't drag out the story as long as possible since I think the fic's great premise (Shinji being whipped) has been stretched a little thin after only seven chapters.
| Toriano.Flacko chapter 7 . 8/16/2012
Hmmm... progress. And this time it seems he didn't think to go to, say, Kaji, Misato, or even Toji on the basics, at least... (did I put that right? I don't think I did). On the one hand, I want to see him take the guide seriously and see it backfire (... huh, maybe I am a sadist), on the other hand I want to see it work better than he thinks. When of two minds, flip a coin, it usually works.
As for the main plottism... hmm. On that note, why /not/ ask her for help? As she's more worried about it than he is (apparently not openly enough for him to figure) and it would probably actually work better than what he tried considering she actually does have training. Hmm. Perhaps you're going somewhere with that one? I'll try to keep up this time.
| Jho chapter 7 . 6/24/2012
I forgot about this story for a while, I'm really glad I got a chance to get back into it. This is definitely one of my favorite Eva stories, and the progression from the beginning to now has been very interesting.
I especially like the conflicts, Kaji's advice, and how Shinji is responding to all these situations.
| X13 chapter 7 . 5/17/2012
Great chapter and story, though I felt that if you wanted to, you could have ended this story at the end of chapter four. i look forward to future chapters.
| XliliumX chapter 7 . 5/9/2012
Hmm Beta reader? I've read your story and well... maybe I don't have such a good grammar since I didn't notice more than a couple of mistakes here and there, and even then, they weren't notorious.
PS: Update as soon as posible please! Don't die again!
| Janrok24 chapter 7 . 5/9/2012
Really enjoying this story so far, keep it up! :)
| mike chapter 7 . 5/7/2012
The conversation with Rei made me smile.
| Mister Nemesis chapter 7 . 5/7/2012
Wow. I had completely given up hope that this story would ever get another update, despite it being my favorite story of those that you've written (and I'm a fan of quite a few). To say that I was both surprised and overjoyed to see that I had an e-mail about an update is . . . well, not an understatement. It's quite accurate, really. I'm glad to see you returning to it, so much that, hey, I've actually signed in to my FF profile for the first time in years just so I could write a review!
With regards to the actual story, I must say it's nice to see some progress with regards to Shinji's character development, as well as his relationship with Asuka. Also nice that his friends are actually willing to listen to what he wants once he speaks up about it. Kaji, as always, is a riot, in addition to being an excellent source of wisdom (even if he seems to enjoy dangling the lessons of his little diatribes beyond Shinji's reach just a little TOO much). In fact, I can't help wondering if his know-how might just come from some experiences you yourself may have had, hm?
Anyway, I also wanted to mention that I, personally, would like to get a look into Asuka's head at some point in all this. You know, get a glimpse of her opinion on their relationship and other issues, and see just how often what Shinji thinks she's thinking lines up with her actual thoughts. Not necessarily a whole chapter, mind you, but perhaps just a peek every now and then. Of course, I can understand why you might shy away, since part of the drama comes from not knowing what's going on in her head. Maybe something at the end of the story, looking back?
Also (to all the other readers out there who actually bother skimming the reviews), am I the only wondering what might happen if either one of them starts feeling the urge to take things to another level? Not in a 'oh man I totally wanna read about a pair of fictional 14-year-olds getting it on' way, but in a 'ooh, I wanna see how they handle their issues with intimacy' way. I mean, it seems like something they'd have to confront at some point, realistically. They ARE teenagers, after all. Just wondering if anybody shares the sentiment, or if I'm just a weirdo.
Alright, enough speculative meandering. Bottom line, I'm happy the story is back in action, and I'm already salivating for more. Really looking forward to your next chapter!