|Reviews for The Military Dance Competition|
| 7colornotebook chapter 1 . 6/9/2008
._. o_o O_O 0_0 O_O o_o ._.
Frankenstein...? What was inside your brain when you were writing this...? xD
| Migchao chapter 3 . 12/19/2006
The good side was that the paragraphs were shorter.
The bad sides were that it was mostly the song, not the story. It was like you were telling us what the song was instead of writing the actual fanfic. Also, if a character is talking, please seperate paragraphs, or it's confusing. Seriously. It was kind of hard telling who was talking. Also, you need to work on your grammar (like the last sentence, "Please *give*" instead of "Please gives."
I don't know what songs or people to put though...
I hope you improve, I want to see the story get better. It's pretty good, though.
| Migchao chapter 1 . 12/13/2006
Sorry, I couldn't read it. The text walls were HUGE. You need to break them up, and when a character speaks, you seperate paragraphs or it's hard to tell who's speaking. And don't use popular songs-it can get annoying.
Other than those, it was pretty good.