|Reviews for Ramble On|
| stealthyone chapter 1 . 12/20/2006
Boys in peril. Yummy! *g*
Great to see another story from you so soon. You’re so darned prolific!
I love how this one opens, right in the middle of the action. Just a great sequence of events to get the reader immediately invested in the story. Nice.
I also like how you’re using the flashbacks, making them of varying length and inserting them at just the right moments.
“Dean, behind you!” Sam found the air he’d been missing. He sucked it all back in when he saw the wendigo literally loom over Dean in the wan light filtering in from the mouth of the cave. He actually reached toward Dean, his instincts screaming at him to shove Dean aside
I love how Sam, despite being incapacitated, tries to help Dean. Such a good little brother *pets Sam*
Puffing out a series of breaths to try to still the nausea that immediately hit when he shifted his leg, Sam started to pull himself toward Dean’s still form.
Poor, hurting Sam! You sure did mess him up in this chapter. *g*
“Sam,” his name was a mere breath of air whispered across his brother’s still unaware lips. It wasn’t acknowledgment of his presence. It was simply Dean’s first thought upon waking, verbalized through his bewilderment.
I love this, how Dean’s first thought upon waking is of Sam.
Sam nodded once. He was sweating and shaking, but he was focused on controlling his breathing. Dean’s here… Dean’s here… Dean’s here…
Aww, I so love how much Sam relies on Dean’s presence to calm himself.
“You do that a lot, you know,” Sam said, his eyes steady on Dean’s.
“Count the beats in a song,” Sam said, watching Dean’s eyebrows go up in surprise. “Mostly when you’re hurting.”
Sam’s so sneaky. *g* Or not, since Dean quickly figures out what he’s up to here. But Sam gets points for trying. :)
Sam got out of bed and crept to the door, trying to be really quiet, wanting to ask his brother to come to bed. He could sleep if Dean were there.
“Go back to bed, Sammy.”
I love how even though Sam tried to be sneaky, Dean knew he was there. It’s like the whole thing with moms having eyes in the back of their heads. *g* Kids just aren’t as quiet as they think they are.
Autumn night, northern Minnesota woods, minimal supplies, no blankets, in a wendigo’s lair. Perfect Winchester evening.
*g* Yeah, that’s about par for the course for them.
As he reached for the first aid kit, he heard the unmistakable sound of gravel falling from the cliff face above. Sam lifted his eyes to the darkness above and saw two eyes reflecting the light that danced from the crystals on the ceiling.
“Oh, shit,” he breathed.
Oh, dear! Cliffhanger! *gleefully rubs hands together*
| Onari chapter 8 . 12/20/2006
Sorry for taking this long to review! I've been a bit caught up with work.
So you finished! No! Well, not because the story hasn't found its natural ending, but because you've managed to left us craving for more, as usual!
The story about Running Horse and his brother was very sad. After all, it all started because he wanted to save his little brother, to defeat death. He turned into a monster, no doubt about that, but now I can't help feeling sorry for him, and for Running Horse, of course. I especially like this line:
"As if feeling his gaze, Running Horse murmured, “Seyenz.” He lifted a shoulder in apology.
Sam pressed his lips together, then nodded. “I know. I couldn’t have done it either,” he whispered."
Well, exactly, just as I don't doubt Sam would have acted exactly the same with the faith healer in Nebraska even if he had know about the reaper. Ok, maybe he would have managed it so that Dean never found out, though.
Of course, I can't even start saying how much I've loved all the need to be held, the fear of falling, the fierce will not to let go. It's especially heart-breaking that Dean voices his plea.
"“Don’t let go’ame, Sam,” Dean whispered.
“Don’t let go… I’ll fall if you let go,”
And that Sam complies.
“Sam?” Dean whispered through frozen lips.
“I’m not going anywhere, man.”
“Sam looked up. “Might make him sleepy?” he asked.
“Well, if I told him that I was going to knock him out, what do you think he’d do?”
Sam looked back at Dean. “Tell you to go to hell.”
“I just wanted you to know…” he couldn’t continue...
“I know, Sammy.”...
“I mean it, man,” Sam said softly."
Perfect dialogue. Who says they don't express how much they love each other?
Well, I know this review is a bit shorter, sorry about that! I wanted to tell you I'm looking forward to read your next story. About that, I'm going to be honest with you, because you deserve it: I'd rather have it without OFC! But hey, you know I'll be right there to read it! (If the alerts allow us :s)
Congrats for your excellent story. And Merry Christmas!
PS. I listen to Staind every day now (it a good background music while I'm working)! I'm totally with you about Right Here Waiting!
| Sanderspleen chapter 1 . 12/20/2006
All I can say is...when's the next story coming out? Your writing is so incredible...you keep the boys so true! Bring on the new brotherly angst! I have you in my "favorites" so I'm just waiting to see any new stories coming from you. Bring it on! And Merry Christmas!
| Em chapter 8 . 12/19/2006
| sams1ra chapter 8 . 12/19/2006
"It seemed he was such a cornerstone in this family. And yet… and yet it was as though he were invisible at the same time. He was gravity. Needed, depended upon, and unseen." I like the analogy. Not the first time I've heard it, and I agree with it. He's like the ground – you ignore it and step on it because you know it'll always be there. Until there's a quake – and then you hold on to it for dear life… But… it's over now *is pouting* Good story, I really enjoyed it!
| Raven524 chapter 8 . 12/18/2006
I really enjoyed this story...it was so original and well written. I'll be looking for your sequel!
| K chapter 1 . 12/18/2006
This was an awesome story. I'm here because Dodger Winslow recced it. And I'm so glad she did. This was damn near perfect. Great job!
| Nilah chapter 8 . 12/18/2006
This was entertaining, beautiful, fantastic, magnificent! Did I miss any? Wonderfully crafted, and warmly told. And the best part of fan fiction to me is when the story just makes you feel the characters even more. Thank you.
I loved your other stories, so please keep writing. I never say no to Dean angst / hurt. I thought Brenna was a lovely character. I can hardly wait to see some more sparks(?)
| River City chapter 5 . 12/18/2006
I am working my way through this story and I wanted to pause long enough to let you know how much I am enjoying it. I think you are really a great writer! You give great descriptions that enable your reader to visualize what is going on and, with Supernatural fanfiction, you take some fairly complicated material and describle the action really well. My only constructive criticism would be that the language is very occasionally a little more foul than I like to see. I realize that many may think our boys would use worse language than TV allows, in "real life", but I guess I am old fashioned. I like my heroes to be a little less "potty-mouthed". Otherwise, I think your dialogue is awesome! I think you catch the witty sarcasm of the brothers perfectly. The writers for the show should hire you!
| TraSan chapter 8 . 12/18/2006
| Jennygeee chapter 8 . 12/18/2006
“Dean?” Sam asked, an entire conversation of care spoken through one word. - I know just what you mean by this, I can hear the way Sam would say this.
“Don’t let go… I’ll fall if you let go,” Dean’s voice was so low Abe could barely hear him. That is just how I see Dean – if Sam ever lets go Dean would fall!
“Don’t know where the keys are, exactly, but uh,” Dean licked his lips, pausing, then continued. “I’d really appreciate if you went over to Kingsley Trail and picked up my car.”
Sam’s eyebrows shot up. He looked at Abe, catching his eye, trying to say without words that this was Big. Feel the weight of this request; it is Dean’s way of saying I believe you, I trust you, I thank you. – Abe has certainly found his way into Dean’s heart.
“..if we have many more conversations like this we’re going to have to paint the Impala pink.” - .So funny, can you imagine Dean driving a Pink Impala?
What I love about your stories GS is that you always go far enough but never too far, you always know when to finish. I was thinking this as I was reading and then I read your note at the end and you are right – always leave the reader wanting more! As much as I would love this to go on and on I think you actually ended it perfectly. And you know what? Although I’m sad it’s over – you are writing another! And with Brenna too! I can’t wait and I love dark tales! You are on my alert so I will know when you put it up. Merry Christmas to you, your Hubby and your baby and thank you for sharing this story with us. All yours are on my favourite list.
| purehalo chapter 8 . 12/18/2006
Absolutely amazing! But you know i love this
Perfect ending, felt so natural and as much as i'd love this to go on forever it ended at the right time
Thank you so much for sharing this amazing story, so beautifully written and full of such insight and love
| ChaiGrl chapter 8 . 12/18/2006
I know all good things must come to an end, but I loved your story so much I wish I hadn't. LOL. However, you wrote a fantastic ending. It really flowed and came to a natural ending. Your characterization was simply amazing. I really enjoyed getting to know your original characters. They fit into the supernatural world very easily. I hope you have more stories waiting to be written. Until your next post, take care and have a wonderful holiday. Happy Writing!
| Shiro chapter 8 . 12/18/2006
Excellent story, excellent ending! As for Season 2 - Bring back Brenna!
| Emrys1 chapter 8 . 12/18/2006
Okay, so I just found this fic Saturday, and I've read it all the way through from the first word to the last with barely a break to catch my breath in between (thankfully, I took a few great inhalations when I had to wait for the last chapter). Yes, it was quite a feat, but so, so easy to accomplish because this was just a WONDERFUL fic!
So wonderful, in fact, that it's making me itch to write...this is after I vowed to give myself a couple of weeks off. The plan was to start again after Christmas, but your story has my fingers feeling a mite twitchy!
What a great job! And I so completely respect you for finishing the story at its natural end instead of drawing it out until it became something less.
Great job (oh, I said that already...well, it bears repeating!)! Now, I get to read your two earlier fics and hope that I don't run out of words before you start posting your next one (although I will probably run out of breath before then! Hey! If you don't hear from me again, better send out a search party, because I'm probably passed out and blue from oxygen deprivation...I can picture it now...Slumped onto the computer with my forehead endlessly pressing the 'b' key!)!
Loved, this! Thanks so much for sharing!