|Reviews for The Memory Chest|
| Kairan1979 chapter 37 . 7/5/2013
While the story was good, I expected Dumbledore's chest with memories to play more important role. Like seeing the replay of Dumbledore/Grindewald duel and taking tips; or learning advanced combat magic etc. Instead, after all the efforts fo find a pensieve, the memories are nothing but a training tool for D.A. (I refuse to call them 'Harry's Heroes').
The winged broom is another disappointment (I expected something like using advanced brooms during Battle for Hogwarts).
| bearblue chapter 37 . 6/10/2013
Wonderful AU ending to the series. Thank you for sharing this.
| Xiaou Nem chapter 37 . 5/15/2013
What a great story!
It felt very realistic and very true to the books.
I think my main problem with Rowling's DH is how so many things are new to the last books. I like it when a story is so well prepared that I can guess what will happen - and I realise in the last book how she planted clues in the very first one about how it would end. This is not something she delivers on. But then again, my expectations might have been to high. :-)
You deliver! You've answered questions about Sirius, the Horcruxes, the D.A. - I especially like the point about our choices in life, and how you ended the story with his life choices to be who he wants to be, and not to be someone that is imposed externally.
Percy was good as well.
Harry was prone to a lot of anger. I didn't like that, or the scene in the DoM, with him cursing. But then again, maybe it is good, although I feel uncomfortable with it?
Ginny and Hermione were well portrayed, Neville and Ron as well.
Your portrayal of McGonagall was good as well. :-) There's our major light female character for the last battle.
One thing: compared to the JKR DH, too few people died. But if I hadn't read DH first, I think I wouldn't complain... She pulled some surprises on us (Snape, Harry Hc) that were impossible to predict (I guess many would have speculated, but maybe thought were too far-fatched). But it is hard to compare, I enjoyed this immensely. :-D
Keep up the good work!
I'd love to find out how you find DH and how you think your concepts compared.
| E J ect chapter 31 . 11/18/2012
I heard about the barrier between the worlds being thinnest in one of Madeline l'Engle's books, the one with druids.
| Ilandriel chapter 37 . 10/18/2012
Good story, well done.
| Wizco chapter 1 . 8/9/2012
The Marauder's Oath was the first thing anyone thought of.
Makes me think Harry might be an idiot.
| Starfire23 chapter 37 . 6/1/2012
Wow, I think I liked this story even better than I liked the official seventh book. You really did come close on a lot of things , but I really appreciated you fixing a lot of the things that bugged me. For instance, Harry gets to go back to school and be a kid for a short time in his life. Also, you got the ministry cleaned up, didn't destroy the Founder's objects, let Neville take out Bellatrix, and gave Lupin a great future. I was disappointed that Snape was a bad guy, but how could you know what he went through until after the seventh book came out? At least it's more realistic to think he could have escaped and lived a happy life elsewhere in yours than in Rowling's. I love her work, but she has a definite tendency to kill off all my favorite characters. Anyway, thanks again. It's been awesome.
| Debate4life chapter 37 . 4/9/2012
Really liked this, though it distracted me overmuch from homework...
| X-elemental chapter 37 . 4/6/2012
Given the lack of love playing any notable sort of part in the story before ending(okay, Ginny and Harry getting together is important, but they could've been friends too and nobody has destroyed dark lords through the power of getting back together with an ex-girlfriend) it seems really forced, much like Harry starting to like Ginny in the JKR's books. On the plus side, it at least made use of a plot hook, but it might have been as well as deus ex, plus Dumbledore is known to not have been the most reliable narrator. In fact, it fits together with the rest of the story so well that I'd have to think that somebody put you under an imperio/a gun to write ending with Voldemort destroyed by love.
The story leading up to it, though, was ranging from good to near-excellent. The final battle(though it came a bit rushed, being stumbled upon and could have been missed entirely, had Draco, Goyle and Grabbe moved up 5 minutes later,much like Ginny being a maiden - snort - and that the only substantial losses - seemingly, what about the memories Voldemort destroyed? - were in that part. Nothing is made about the loss of a memory vial, really...The original books suffer a bit of it, too, but Dumbledore's and Sirius's death is far more harrowing with far lesser comparable upside. Just leading up to a narrative.), the happenings with the ministry, the conflicts with Hermione, Ron, etc. all around that showed the trio's individuality. Overall, it compares very well to the 7th book, being rather similar and overall - better.
| X-elemental chapter 26 . 4/6/2012
bit of a small problem here:
Albania, during the time, was part of the USSR IIRC. The border was literally always patrolled during the time. Somebody trying to enter without proper papers would have been brought in for 'questioning'. And probably killed.
The way to get in would be to take a portkey, then go from there. Still dangerous and still has language barrier the likes that can be fatal, but other than that nowhere as problematic.
And, of course, if you add some sort of deus ex to learn languages quickly no reason why this couldn't be used in studying other things.
| TheNStorm chapter 37 . 3/7/2012
Hm. Not bad as stories, or even books, go. And while I applaud your character-making skills, there's something in me that would very much like to see the memory chest in its real function.
Your story appears incomplete in this way (as it does with explorations of Egypt, and some few other half-started or just-mentioned adventures).
I do like your ending point (though I wouldn't be opposed to a sequel).
Overall, four to four-and-a-half stars. Not bad at all.
| TheNStorm chapter 30 . 3/7/2012
"Not today," he said, taking a deep breath.
Been reading Garth Nix, have we? Still, choosing to take that scene demonstrates good taste, I think.
| puiwaihin chapter 37 . 1/29/2012
Very nice. I notice you followed the revealed ending last word being "scar".
I notice a lot of the ideas you used have been clearly copied by others. Not sure if you are the original for all of the ideas, but clearly this is a fairly influential piece of fanfic. Kudos on the work you did!
| GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 37 . 10/31/2011
Other than an annoying sprinkling of spelling errors, I think this story is at least as good as canon Deathly Hallows. It's hard to write a good conclusion to the series after the disaster that is Half Blood Prince because Dumbledore hasn't left Harry powerful enough or knowledgeable enough to hunt down the Horcruxes without a lot of frustrating thrashing. Plus with only the trio in on the secret he's too isolated from any allies. But at least this story didn't follow him camping aimlessly out in the middle of nowhere while all the action was happening with the DA at Hogwarts.
The ending isn't quite as good though, because Harry didn't actually fulfill the literal words of the prophesy (Voldemort should have died at Harry's hand, not Remus'). But Neville got to take down Bellatrix which is a plus. I would have liked to have seen a werewolf and giant snake wrestling match.
I would have liked to have seen a more credible pairing for Harry than canon. Harry definitely has more in common with Luna than Ginny. And excluding Harry's love interest (whoever it is) from the Horcrux hunt makes the pairing fall flat.
Ron and Hermione grew up enough that they weren't quite as obnoxious as canon. That's a good thing.
| GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 21 . 10/30/2011
Never "Delores", always "Dolores".