you have a few mistakes here and there with spelling, and dropping a few words here and there. nothing major. i get that it's a song fic, but I would suggest you put that in your summary otherwise it surprises the reader when they begin to read. i don't think you have gone too fast, but you have definitely set yourself up for a multi-chapter story here hon. you could put a little more detail, and elaborate a bit more, but that's about it. i like the story, it's a sweet beginning!

cool! I hope you'll have this done in time for Christmas!

I really like the first chapter.I can't wait for the next chapter.