Reviews for Kim Possible X: Full Metal Hunter episode 8
Darth Comrade chapter 1 . 4/1/2007
Alright, so I've decided to check how your skills developed after practice, I must say there's an improvement there!

You've started structuring more and I can see a little narrating, very good!

Now here's a tip from me.

when it comes to dialouge, that's when characters talk, use qoutations. for example:

The old man saw the body of the blonde boy.

"Who's that?" he said.

Kim laughed and replied, "Oh, that's my friend, Ron."

Note, the qoutes (that's these " ") come before the narration (that's the words 'he said') in the second line.

And after the narration in the third line. (

normally the way you do it is done for scripts. But with stories you should use qoutations.

Sorry if it sounds a little complicated, but that's what makes writing so fun. Once you've mastered this you'll see automatic changes to your stories, you'll see! :)

I'll be watching future work from you, my fellow KP fan! ;)

Darth_Comrade