|Reviews for Kim Possible X: Full Metal Hunter episode 8|
| Darth Comrade chapter 1 . 4/1/2007
Alright, so I've decided to check how your skills developed after practice, I must say there's an improvement there!
You've started structuring more and I can see a little narrating, very good!
Now here's a tip from me.
when it comes to dialouge, that's when characters talk, use qoutations. for example:
The old man saw the body of the blonde boy.
"Who's that?" he said.
Kim laughed and replied, "Oh, that's my friend, Ron."
Note, the qoutes (that's these " ") come before the narration (that's the words 'he said') in the second line.
And after the narration in the third line. (
normally the way you do it is done for scripts. But with stories you should use qoutations.
Sorry if it sounds a little complicated, but that's what makes writing so fun. Once you've mastered this you'll see automatic changes to your stories, you'll see! :)
I'll be watching future work from you, my fellow KP fan! ;)