|Reviews for I can help you|
| geko-blackjack chapter 5 . 10/30/2007
Very interesting and gripping fic. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter!
I don't think the characters are too OOC, apart from maybe Mr Dickinson, who I always thought had a bit of a soft spot for Kai. That's just my opinion though.
Also, you use the word "paniced" once or twice in this chapter, when it should be "panicked", and in the line "Kai felt his lips twitch in a desprit smirk." it should read "Kai felt his lips twitch into a desperate smirk".
I do hope I didn't sound too patronising there. Just trying to make a great fic with a really good plot even better. _
Lovely chapter, please update soon!
| RyuuKai chapter 5 . 9/20/2007
please update this fic!
| Ryuran123352 chapter 5 . 3/5/2007
Poor Kenny... He's such a sweet kid but he gets himself into some sticky situations... why didn't he think before he asked that?
Poor Kai too... Majorly misunderstood, as he always is...
The chapters are a little short but I like the detail.
| piecehomepeac chapter 1 . 2/19/2007
I just love, LOVE this story...
you gotta update soon..
| Party in the Afterlife chapter 5 . 1/10/2007
Hello! No no one was OOC. It's perfect the way it is okay?
| Iluvbeyblade chapter 5 . 1/8/2007
Why didn't I review last chap? *hits self on head* I'm an idiot!
Anyway, loved this chapter! You didn't ramble! Or if you did, can't say I noticed! I'm DESPERATE now, what the hell is Kai's grandfather DOING to him? And there's definitely something between him and Kenny! Not in a relationship sort of way, in a kind of ... empathic way. It's like Kenny can see stuff about Kai that no one else has or can.
Does that make sense? 0o' Anyway, yeah. I really love the way you've got Kai reacting, it just seems to work! And who doesn't love a misunderstood bad boy? Lol!
Ok, ending my ranting review. Update soon, please! Pretty please?
| Tuli-Susi chapter 5 . 12/26/2006
in all honesty...when dealing with abuse, whether you're the victim or someone trying to help them or the abuser, no-one is really in character, in other words, I think you're fine on that respect...Keny's was a surprise though...
| Sonora Avilon chapter 5 . 12/25/2006
i don't believe that kenny was ooc, but kai just a bit. i don't know what it was, or if it was just me, but some quirk or description just didn't sound right at some point to me. it might be because i was writing one of my own stories before i read this, because they're rally ooc, and it's probably still on my mind. oh well. it's great. i hope that you update soon, it's getting good.
p.s. still some spelling mistakes...
| Amanita Virosa-Amaranthus chapter 5 . 12/25/2006
WHA? the chappie is done? ... NO! lol..please update Soon!
| Sonora Avilon chapter 4 . 12/21/2006
your spelling isn't too bad and there are some grammar mistakes, but hey, no one's completely perfect. the story is going along nicely, and there's only one more thing i need to say. in some of your chapters you've used the same phrases or the same words in a row or used them more than twice. when people write like that, the story sounds repetitive and people think to themselves, "where have i just read that?" so just watch out for that, otherwise the story is great and i hope that you continue!
| Party in the Afterlife chapter 4 . 12/21/2006
I love it. I don't think any of the characters are OOC.
I love you're story. I'm really glad you update so fast. Update again soon.
| bladz-liska chapter 3 . 12/18/2006
Hi! Interesting story, yes, maybe something OOC but anyway it's different (in a good way). I like it! I just hope it won't be a yaoi story. Really? I hope it!
| bobo the hobo chapter 3 . 12/17/2006
oh my god, why haven't more people reviewed this masterpiece? honestly this is one of the best stories i have ever read, and i have read quite a few of them. it's thrilling and captivating and it has just enough implicit mixed with explicit. it's a delight to read, and re-read, and re-re-read.
please update soon, please, please!
| Party in the Afterlife chapter 3 . 12/17/2006
O.O I love it. Poor Kai...I feel so sorry for him. You're description is really good, you feel really close to Kai when you read it.
Update soon, I wanna know what happens!
| Iluvbeyblade chapter 3 . 12/17/2006
Poor Kai! *hugs Kai* He's so very stubborn! And so very, very messed up.
Loved this chapter! Ooh, they meet next chap! That could be interesting ... (sniggers)
Please update soon! .