|Reviews for Her Attention|
| nightwalker21492 chapter 1 . 1/13/2011
this is my second or third time reading this. lol. u should continue with this instead of leaving it a one-shot. :)
| WhereIsYourHeart10 chapter 1 . 8/22/2010
this was very intriguing, and hermione is probably most likely to be caught staring lol. good story!
| Karma's Slave chapter 1 . 10/4/2008
great job, i loved it
| Laia Moon chapter 1 . 8/30/2008
It made me grin. quite widely, in fact. Just had to tell you that.
I thought it was quite original. Part of me would like to read more, but the rest of me has decided that you ended it just where it should end.
| kasjfksdf chapter 1 . 1/19/2007
You rawk. Really badly.
You've converted me into a SBHG fan.
People reallyy have to stop making me fall in love with so many pairings. I recently started liking tom x hermione and even cedric x hermione.
Anyhoo, the story was really cute, and kept me interested.
Good job. :)
| JoeBob1379 chapter 1 . 1/13/2007
Wow, I love it! I really liked the way you portrayed the characters, and the situation was just great. Good job : )
| mishybot chapter 2 . 12/29/2006
Personally I think you should not do a time turner one, I get annoyed with how many of them there are out there. LOL. I liked this story a lot too by the way. :D
| Mrs Pierre Bouvier chapter 2 . 12/29/2006
That was a hot Herm/Sirius and was exactly what I was looking for thank you!
| puppylove36923 chapter 1 . 12/20/2006
| R J Lupin's Kat chapter 1 . 12/20/2006
For a first drabble, it was quite nice. Painted a delicious scene, anyway. ;-)
Watch your grammar and correct word usage. Yes, I know, I am the queen of fragmented sentences - artistic license, thank you! ;-) But I mean items such as ending quotes (a common issue I've seen throughout ffn). Majority of the time you'll want to use a comma, end quotes, one space, lowercase letter. That is, if you are using the 'he/she said,' format of the sentence. Only make the 'who said what' part a separate sentence if you are truly intending to make it stand on its own, and not be a part of the quote itself.
Check your word usage: his 'taut' neck, rather than his 'taught' neck. Nice reference, though. And please watch your wording, as sometimes it is a bit difficult to follow. Yes, again, I know; my ecclectic writing strays far from the easy-to-follow at times, but it's very intentional, I promise! ;-)
All said, you created a wonderful little drabble piece that is humorous and charming. And if you're stupid, many more of us are, too. I doubt seriously she will, but to have Sirius return would be absolutely heavenly.
| KCK1169 chapter 1 . 12/17/2006
Wonderful! I absolutely loved this one! I wish you would do another chapter on this one, but that's the only remotely negative thing I can think of to say! Please write more of these...please :)
| Riptiderobin chapter 1 . 12/16/2006
That was hot! Very pleasent and left me longing to read more!