Reviews for Strained Harmony |
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![]() ![]() ![]() This is such lovely story, I'm in tears reading it! love how each chapter has been. it gives me great ideas for a story of my own. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Dang it sunshine why is it so perfect I needs more why do u do this to me I needs like 18 more chapters |
![]() ![]() ![]() Lol I just realized u wrote this fan fic sunshine I should of knew I'd love it since ur my favorite fanfic author tho I'm only on chapter 2 and I find myself sad because I only have 4 chapters left |
![]() ![]() ![]() Omg I originally started reading this like a week ago then stopped because I was unsure if I'd like the topic I came back and just finished the first chapter and I'm so glad I returned its so long but so good |
![]() ![]() ![]() So there’s things I like about this and things I think don’t work. I will preface this with saying I usually have a high tolerance for OOC moments in AUs, but after maybe chapter 2 Ranma’s basically an OC. Now I like the idea of Ranma using this as an opportunity of getting out a toxic relationship, getting friends, and going to stealth as a girl the rest of it doesn’t work well. You have this whole weight gain thing going on that doesn’t really make sense. I know it’s suppose to be jarring but it kinda comes off as fetish fuel. You have this sort of SMS thing going on with the maid aesthetic. On top of that while I love lesbian pairings there’s almost no build up to Pluto’s and Ranma’s romance despite all of this time that gets spent on Ranma’s rehabilitation. Which sucks because your prose is almost pretty on point with the rest of your fics. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Finally got caught up on this story. I remember reading the first chapter many years ago and thinking it had the potential to be one of the greatest stories I ever read. Sadly it dropped in quality after that. It is still good writing, but maybe there's a bit too much focus on dresses and shopping. By far my favourite part of the story is when Ranma changes back into the male body, only to realize that her gender is a girl. Very powerful scene. But we don't get really get that many more of these introspective scenes in which Ranma considers what it means and how she finds herself changing. Or we have a single scene in which Ranma kinda mentions she's starting to consider herself a girl, but after that we don't really have any meaningful talks about Ranma's gender identity again. The whole Ranma becoming a Sailor Scout idea is great, I love Sailor Ranma stories. But we only see her participate in a single fight, then some examinations and after that it just kinda seems to drop away. For the last few chapters Ranma being Hestia is mostly just a matter of just being a title so she can interact with the other Senshi. Also what exactly happened with the curse interacting with the Senshi transformation? Ami scanned Ranma and said she was a normal girl. Would have been nice with this scene where Ranma checks if she still has the curse or not (which could also lead to an amazing scene in which Ranma goes completely dysphoric if she still has the curse because she's gone 100% girl or if it is locked, go through a small crisis because she realize that she should feel bad losing the male side, yet finds herself being happy that she no longer needs to concern herself with waterproof soap. Ranma and Nodoka are also two characers that have a lot of potential. And while they do have talks, Ranma has at that point realized who she is, that she's a girl and that she does not need her mothers approval to survive. But if she tells about Mr. Panda (just drop some tea on him) and then asks Nodoka to return, there could be this powerful scene in which Ranma reveals that she was Nodoka's son, but is now her daughter. With Setsuna supporting Ranma and is prepared to step in to defend her. Anyway, I think I have said enough for now. Hope there'll one day be more chapters. |
![]() ![]() Dragon Man 180: That crack(?) about the bunny suit makes me think; if Jeannie (I Dream of Jeannie) got a gig as a "chick" pokemon instead of Sailor Moon, she could use her magic to girl up her harem outfit into a bishoujo sailor senshi outfit. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I have to say this has been a good fic... I wished you would have continued the new invader part of the story, but it looks to have been dropped out to show Ranma & Setsuna's growing relationship... And don't get me wrong I love the Ranma & Pluto pairing... But I mean according to your own telling of time, its been 2 almost 3 years since Ranma has changed into Sailor Hestia and we haven't seen any more then just that one encounter. I personally am not a big fan of Fem-Ranma stories, and yet this it another is a story that I have enjoyed as much as "Thy Outward Part" I would love to see more of this. Ranma as a female plump bunny had me rolling on the floor, I loved it... and to all the haters... most of her plumping can be blamed on her spoiling Hotaru... He was happy that it fooled Nabiki & the people from Hong Kong... However, its Hotaru treating Ranma like a pet to feed little tidbits to all the time she can and then getting spoiled by Setsuna don't help... Plus Ranma knows that Setsuna knows all his secrets, even the curse... So by my math he should be out or almost out of Water-proof Soap... So hot water strike would now send Ranma into a panic... But all in all Great Story and keep writing... |
![]() ![]() ![]() To defend the author, there is a reason Ranma is so out of character in this fic. S/He is not an original Senshi, or reborn princess. The power which operates "Sailor Hesta" needs to compensate for the Jusinkyo curse. And Countess Nemesis is also behind Ranma's femizating personally for her own reasons. I was told by the author that in the end, it will all make sense. And Ranma will have to make a choice. |
![]() ![]() ![]() The Ranma in this story is SO OOC. Canon Ranma HATED being transformed into a girl, and his primary motivation was being the World's Best Martial Artist. Hiding out as a nanny is pretty reasonable. Even getting into a "lesbian" relationship. But going PLUMP?! That would absolutely KILL the Martial Arts. (Especially going as plump as some of the DeviantArt pics go) |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I am so infinitly frustrated with this fic. on one had the writing is fantastic, and part of the story is a great premise, i love the 'transformation turbulence' but... Ranma's been turned into a wilting flower/trophy wife and it disgusts me on a deep level. the pretentious showing off to her friends about how rich she lives now just adds to that frustraition. I want tocontinue but the complete decay of a strong (and misguided) confident character into this.. wreck, is too much for me. To be a dick though, why must you use blush so much? is she so full of shame now that just greeting her is enough to make her well up with embaressment? Argh! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thank you for writing this fic. What I like: Ranma getting away from Nerima and getting a better life. Ranma accepting his girl side. Ranma & Akane being friends. Ranma having friends. Nabiki being outsmarted and getting her just desserts. The character flaw of Nodoka believing the best of her hubby, but then realizing later the truth. So many to mention. What I dislike: Too much stuff that are about dresses and fashion that pads the story, but can actually be skipped. As such, the story felt as if the plot slowed to a crawl these past three chapters. For me, the most interesting parts of the story were the ones dealing with internal crisis, such as when Ranma realized how happy she is as a girl there. Fashion and flirting are fun, but I feel like it's too much sometimes here. Still, thanks for writing this story. We all need "Ranma goes away and becomes happy" fics. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think I read the completed version somewhere else. This fic is a hoot. It starts all innocent and cute, turns into informative piece on cultural clothing, and eventually turns into some sort of pretty dirty fetish story. This amuses me. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Is that a Curta mechanical calculator? |