|Reviews for Strained Harmony|
| ariel stormcloud chapter 1 . 12/19/2006
great story. interesting to see how it develops from here.
| Sean chapter 1 . 12/19/2006
excellent pretty much sums it up, wright more soon please
| phoenix.ru chapter 1 . 12/19/2006
You know, for a moment I thought Setsuna was going to seduce Ranma after the "date". I kinda uderstand it's way too ... er .early? _ for this (hehehe... or maybe not _).
At any rate, another high quality product for us to enjoy _
| Dumbledork chapter 1 . 12/19/2006
WOW! PERFECT! I simply love your ideas. Ranma as a nanny. I've never read such a fic before. But I hope you'll continue writing this as there are still too many questions left to be answered and, after all, there already too many unfinished masterpieces out there. No need to add another one to the list. These kind of stories where Ranma tries to solve the problems in his life are my favourites. It's also nice to see a Sailor Moon crossover without any senshi business (although I'm pretty sure that will change in the next chapters). I can alsosee that Ranma is slowly falling for Setsuna (my favourite pairing in Ranma/SM crossover where Setsuna is one of the good guys).
Well 'nuff said. In the words of the great Stan Lee: EXCELSIOR!
| Materia-Blade chapter 1 . 12/19/2006
I agree readily with ozz for the most part. Trimatter, your the author of one of the best stories I've ever laid my eyes on, and Temple. Well, I've adored a few of your fics as well.
The cheesecake was interesting. Made me laugh if anything.
The story readily displays Josh's part of this alliance with the Ranma-chan Transformation Conversion Factor. Now as soon as the "Save the World" Part of the plot comes in (whether it does or not I don't know) I'll see Trimatter's main influence. (Not that neither of you know how to do the other. It's just what I remember both of you most for. Sorry if I offend. *Bows*)
I liked the part Akane is playing in this. Very interesting. I also find it interesting that while Huang and Nabiki have been made ALMOST main characters, they have not yet made an actual appearence, whilst being mentioned as much as Ranma's new friends.
I must admit at first when I heard the word "Ayanami" I was terrified. An Eva cross had NOT been on my "to-read" list for the evening, and when I saw this fic, I had little choice BUT for it to be on my list. Eva or no Eva.
The healing was interesting. I did truly enjoy watching those events unfold.
An error I found (I think): Wasn't Ranma's hair both Dyed and Permed? I don't know what color it was dyed but I figure probably not red. There was a reference in there closer to the end of the story to Ranma's face becoming "as red as the redhead's hair" or something like that during the dinner. I figure I mighta just not caught getting rid of the dye or something, but just figured I'd mention it as it's sorta a plot error (unless I'm completely mistaken.)
I feel the same sort of... lack... that I felt at the beginning of Trugeta's fic "Chaotic Rebirth." That said his fic is currently my favorite continuing fic at the moment. There wouldn't be anything wrong with that usually, but this is a fourty thousand word, setup chapter.
Almost a prologue if you will.
A little excessive? Maybe?
Eh, just a thought.
Regardless, it is incredible from originality, style, story and plotline and all that. Thank you, thank you, ever more deeply for writing.
*Bows once more.*
See ya with the next chap!
| Huge chapter 1 . 12/19/2006
Very nicely done. Defantly looking forward to futher chapters.
| Crimson Yrael chapter 1 . 12/19/2006
Pretty much everything deathgeonous said.
Only thing I would like to add is that even from the beginning, Ranma's excuse of "part of the disguise" seemed kinda flimsy.
That aside, however, I'm really, really, really looking forward to the next chapter of this.
| nantukoprime chapter 1 . 12/19/2006
To very good fukufic authors writing together!
I expect great things, especially since both you and Trimatter seemed to fall off for a while their.
Definitely a good start to a story, with some interesting plot twists and conflicts. I'm sure we haven't even got to any of the big stuff yet, as the Senshi are still in the background. A question though, where in the Ranma timeline is the story? Best i can tell is around manga 30 based on what was mentioned in the story. So that means Ranma knows the Yama- and Umi-senken, right? I think it would be certainly interesting to see how that would affect future battles and such.
| Talon Phoenix chapter 1 . 12/18/2006
great story update soon
| Ozzallos chapter 1 . 12/18/2006
This is gonna be awkward for for me as tri is one of my favorite authors, likewise Sunny and his leather Ranma fics... Awkward mainly because I'm surprised this wasn't an outright win in my book.
I liked the chapter length and level of detail that was infused into the work. It really created an imersive atmosphere while the premise used to get Ranma out of the dojo was wholy believable. Having a caring Setsuna play the straight man while manipulating events to a certain degree while was very well done as was the interaction between Ranma and the other characters. Their depth was likewise satisfying.
Which brings me to the awkward part. As well executed as it was, the chapter *drags*. I'm all one for character evolution and plot laying, and it's obvious that a lot of groundwork is being layed here, but substance is severely lacking, beyond the "lets turn Ranma into a girl" plot. Don't get me wrong, it's probably one of the better renditions out there, but I was hoping for a bit more of the overarching plot to be revealed, personally. Obviously Puu is doing all this for a reason, but this chapter is something we've all read before- "Ranma leaves the Tendos, gets in touch with Ranko"; A plot I'm not at all opposed to, BTW.
My next bit of contention comes from Ranma's abrupt acceptance of girldom. Okay, we give her a perm, put her in nice clothes, give her some friends, all the while she's grumbling about being cute, then one day realizes she's actually happy! After that, it's a pretty quick decent into acceptance. Uhg. That's proabaly just me, however, as I'm sure a lot of your audience won't bat an eye.
Two minor issues: the salon scene seems almost a recycle of Ranko's Makeover. The new hair plot device used to affect a change in perspective and for the love of God, will somebody PLEASE have Ranma recognize Haruka for once? Not that that last comment is nesisarily aimed at this work in particular.
Those are really my two biggest gripes in an otherwise well written and engaging work. I also suspect the remaining balance of the work will help put this chapter in perspective, which will in turn reveal this fic to be greater than the its parts. In any case, I do have to see where you take this, and I guess that's really all that counts in the end.
[x] Add story to my Story Alert list
Note; You only get long ass reviews because I respect you both as authors.
| banty chapter 1 . 12/18/2006
wow! That was somethingelse, especially the length. Like everyone else I really hope there is a second chapter.
| runnerz chapter 1 . 12/18/2006
Yo, Josh, did Trimatter write most of this first chapter? It doens't look a lot like your writing style. I don't know if you plan to factor in a fuku for Ranma, but it could be very interesting if you do it.
| Juicy Sun chapter 1 . 12/18/2006
This was a very satisfying read. It kept me up in the middle of the night before my final semester exams, unfortunately. But I find that it was worth it. I don't often see such engrossing stories of this calibur showing up here anymore.
It seems to me that there's a distinct hint of a future romance between Ranma and Setsuna, correct me if I'm wrong. I'm dieing to see how that pans out, and I'm beside myself to see Ranma take care of his old business.
All in all, the grammar seems fine, and other than one or too easily overlooked errors it all adds up nicely. Keep up the good work, I hope to see more from you soon.
| mystery person chapter 1 . 12/18/2006
it is amazing chapter. i can't explain it how wonderful. please update.
| James Axelrad chapter 1 . 12/18/2006
it exceeds the scale, and as such, cannot be classified. keep this up, and you will be grouped with trimatter, trugeta, and ozallos.