|Reviews for Alchemists of the Caribbean|
| Lyson chapter 2 . 5/17/2014
This could have been written much better because ìt started out nicely. But then, theres too much dialogue without enough scene descriptions to balance ìt out, rushed scenes are the end result of that. Too many unnecessary short jokes used as an attempt at humor where ìt doesnt fit ( annoyingly common occurrence in FMA fanfiction), also Ed's reflexes and fighting abilities are downplayed, knocking Edward out or off balance ìs not an easy task in canon.
And from what little I've read, Jack and Will are either going to be OC going forward, or your not able to portray their characters accurately.
I will not be continuing to read this.
This crit ìs not intended to offend, I like your plot idea, I just think your executing ìt hurriedly & are over killing the early cliches of the FMA fandom and theres a loss of quality in that.
| TruthsMessage chapter 17 . 6/2/2013
Quick question... What the hell is going to happen to Ling? O.o . . .
| samusbot chapter 17 . 2/5/2013
Wait, wait, wait... Envy, Ed, and Ling Yao... got eaten...
BY ENVY? (This is completely wrong! Eaten Gluttony.)
| Rain of the Forest chapter 17 . 10/3/2012
HAH! Wait... HOW THE HELL DOES THAT LADY KNOW HOHENHEIM!
| Rain of the Forest chapter 16 . 10/3/2012
OKAY! WHAT THE HELL!
THE LAST CHAPTER WAS ABOUT ED AND AL BEING FOUND BY JACK AND WILLIAM! WHAT IS UP WITH THIS STORY!
| Rain of the Forest chapter 15 . 10/3/2012
Um... why do the scenes keep changing so weirdly! IT MAKES NO SENSE! YOU ARE CONFUSING ME HERE!
| Rain of the Forest chapter 14 . 10/3/2012
So... THEY COULD OF JUST GONE HOME FROM JUMPING INTO THE GODDAMNED OCEAN!
| Rain of the Forest chapter 13 . 10/2/2012
ARGH! DIE DAVY JONES!
| Rain of the Forest chapter 7 . 10/2/2012
Okay, I didn't really get that last part... but okay..
| Rain of the Forest chapter 6 . 8/13/2012
Oooooooo! Get em Ed!
| Rain of the Forest chapter 4 . 8/13/2012
Oh shit! That's not good...
| Rain of the Forest chapter 3 . 8/12/2012
Hah, I felt that Ed would react like that!
| Rain of the Forest chapter 2 . 8/12/2012
Oh shit! Since when did Ed meet a sailor!
| Serina Elric chapter 16 . 4/30/2012
WHat is that accent that Ed has? British?
| Serina Elric chapter 11 . 4/30/2012
I could see Ed and Will being best friends.