This is an interesting story so far. I wonder why you've rated it M at the moment since blood and minor violence is more T, but then again, I suppose I'll have to wait and see where you go with this to know. Hehe, I don't speak any Spanish, so the translations were VERY helpful. Merci. _

-S. Snowflake

I like your story. Don't worry about the Spanish; there were only a few gramatical errors and anyone who speaks Spanish could understand you. The one thing I would say is: Try to put in more new stuff, instead of just repeating the stuff that we all know off by heart. I liked the scene where Collins goes to Angel's house, but I found the part where Collins calls Mark and Roger boring 'cause I already knew what was going to happen. (Oh and one more thing: If you're translating names into Spanish, just use their names - Mark stays Mark, Collins stays Collins, etc. or you could accidentally call a guy by a girl's name or something)

I like it. Please continue.